Thanks to Fegger and all my dear friends who inspired me to take one step further.

note to the earlier readers:The story has been completely changed.

T’was a time when gods

walked the earth as mortals

fierce battle raged the lands,

for their dominion was unstable

but Light was still existent

insignificant as a candle’s gleam

but growing stronger day by day

He was Irenicus,holy son of archangel

Dynaheir;his blue eyes innocent with the

power to consume all the hatred of the world,

his sacred prayers disrupted the battles,

his radiant smile instilled hope in the devastated of souls.

yet the gods viciously mocked at any sign of love,

and so the savagery continued

until one stormy night

darkness stole all the glory of Light

Earth was thrown asunder

Thunder echoed in acute pain

when the gods sacrificed Irenicus.

*************************************

The elements of happiness and sorrow,

birth and death,

are forbidden to the race of angels,

they consider these hollow earthly traits

like a curse,that goes forth and multiply.

She was strong at heart

she knew her son’s death was a beginning

of a long journey.

**************************************

When Tyriel learned of her son’s death

his eyes was glowing with joy

he contemplated a long time

for this day to arrive.

To him every death has a meaning,a purpose.

Every spirit should learn to look beyond the scar

and realize the bigger cause of their departure

The implications may be unclear at first

hidden behind a veil

The path may be curved,entangled,

but that is the beauty of death.

To learn and evolve into a better being.

through diverse experience.

For Irenicus,the implications were crystal clear

Tyriel knew the prophecy made by his lord Ormus:

“When the blood of a holy child

shall fall on the mortal Earth

seven holy creatures will be born

Together they will unite and form

the dominion of gods,ending the Times

of Troubles.”

******************************************

The motives of the gods are clear when they give

it in the form of dreams.Dynaheir was not surprised

when she saw her son again.His spirit was old and wise

one that knew the secrets of Creation.

“Tell me mother,what your heart has to say”

“Release me son, from the cycle of death and birth,

I no longer wish to come back,let me sleep into oblivion”

Dynaheir saw her little child’s face brightened with joy.

“Worry not Mother,one final task is at hand,the dominion

of gods are  to be formed,and I cannot do without your help”

“Know from this day the tyranny of the seven gods will stop,

13
Liked it
Comments (20)
  • cutedrishti8 on Sep 8, 2009

    Nice one to share…great work….

  • Christine Ramsay on Sep 8, 2009

    An amazing piece. I am impressed.

    Christine

  • lindalulu on Sep 8, 2009

    Wonderful !!!

  • Fegger on Sep 8, 2009

    Great work, my friend.

  • BullwinkleMuse on Sep 8, 2009

    You’ve woven quite a tale here, miraj, rich with characters and imagery. I’d like to see you work more on this type of verse – fleshing out characters, using an economy of words; working more on dialogue. This was a very bold and worthwhile step for you, my friend.

  • Aauhein on Sep 8, 2009

    What a interesting tale.

  • Uma Shankari on Sep 8, 2009

    Great job. Very well written.

  • papaleng on Sep 9, 2009

    Well done.. such a joy to read.

  • gianne on Sep 12, 2009

    Yipee!!! I can finally comment. I’ve been having a hard time leaving comments, but want you to know that I am a HUGE fan of your writing. Love this piece and cannot BELIEVE how much I’ve seen you grow as a writer in my short time here.

    Keep writing, miraj. I know it’s not always about the money or being recognized, but I also know that it’s wonderful and miraculous to have what you love be what you’re known for and what supports you financially too.

    I feel certain that the right eyes will see your writing and you’ll have it all.

  • Kate Smedley on Sep 16, 2009

    Stunning work, gianne is right, keep writing my friend, this is an epic, I will read it again later.

  • XXElleXX on Sep 30, 2009

    Irenicus – champion of falsehood and vanity..Tyriel – champion of justice..Ormus – champion of truth and goodness..a masterpiece Miraj :-)

  • Stephen J. Ardent on Dec 16, 2009

    Epic poetry.

  • lillyrose on Dec 16, 2009

    WOW incredible visual poem, I loved the way you presented it and the story throughout kept me interested!

  • Sheila M on Dec 16, 2009

    Beautifully inspired poetry

  • maranatha on Dec 17, 2009

    Wow! You put a lot into this one. A fascinating yarn, with characters that one can see and feel. You are growing, I think!

    You might want to keep going over this; it is worthy of perfecting. There are places where the tense is confused; like the phrase, “like a curse,that goes forth and multiply” could be changed to “goes forth to multiply”.

  • Nicholas Peterson on Dec 18, 2009

    should read beowulf and grendel. first epic poem written. its in OLDE english, so nearly no one understands it…but its worth the effort.

    also: Don Quixote.

  • hfj on Dec 18, 2009

    A very well written piece Miraj, but i\\\\\\\’ve come to expect no less from you\\\\\\\’re talented gift of writing. Keep up the good work friend. Well done

  • Northernlight on Dec 18, 2009

    It’s an epic, like a story teller of old.

  • Cebah on Dec 20, 2009

    A great story, and a very enjoyable read. Thanks.

  • Theresa Johnson on Dec 21, 2009

    WOW. Wow. You have yet to not amaze me with your grand poems. I hope that I may one day be as great a poet as you miraj. Wonderful work.

Leave a Comment

Hi there!

Hello! Welcome to Authspot, the spot for creative writing.
Read some stories and poems, and be sure to subscribe to our feed!

Find the Spot

Loading