Wow, how did you manage four? Lovely photo, lovely imagery of the sea, you captured it perfectly FJ.

Great Capture.

Wow! You are becoming quite haikuetic. Is there such a word? LOL.
Wonderful work.

Christine

Wonderful sea life poem.

great Haikus..

Good job!! Very beautiful. I love the sea!!

Nice haikus, FJ!

environmental friendly haikus.. thanks FJ!

WOW BEAUTIFUL. I love it, full of beauty and truth.

P.s. could you take a peek at my writing. >.

Beautiful imagery.

Great work…..the poem, the picture, wow…thanks for sharing this.

Great work

great image.excellent writing!

Nice haiku. Well said my friend. We are definitely polluting our oceans and all of the marine life. Well done.

well the picture is just outstanding …i would love to be a octopus or just a shrimp…people just dont get it..the sea can be our last resort…

It is difficult for many to understand that our actions have an impact even beyond our line of sight (so to speak). The deepest oceans, highest peaks and lowest valleys are all impacted by our negligence. Great piece!

pretty cool

nice piece…great job!

i want to eat that turtle LOL

nice work frank number 1 on authspot

Hi, FJ…. I wonder if you realize that these are senryu, not haiku? For more on that you can check out Adam Sears’ article on the haiku. Nice works though! I like the picture, but you could have done the senryu here without it. Thanks for this and have a good one.

this was really nice =)

Great work – praised be the sea!

wow! well done! nice piece of work…

Loving it….

Beautiful poem.Nice photo too.Keep it up!

when did haikus grow longer than 3 lines? turtles shouldn’t just lie around and take the pollution we give them, they should wage war against humanity!

Your haiku is an atrocity and violates all laws of taste and decency. It appears Fortuna has not looked lightly upon you as she has me. You are the reason America is degenerating. A firm rule must be imposed upon our nation before it destroys itself. The United States needs some theology and geometry, some taste and decency. I suspect that we are teetering on the edge of the abyss.

Wow. I just read your poem, and then I read the comments. Damn, Sam, the guy REALLY hates you! No wonder you’re so popular Sorry it took so long to read it, good picture with it. Haiku are wicked hard and just making an attempt is pretty ballsy, but you did just fine. Even if it is in three parts

IGGY ,YOU ARE A PRIME EXAMPLE OF WHAT YOU JUST SAID ABOUT THE AUTHOR.Let those without sin cast the first stone.Great job FJ.

These are good, but they are not haiku, they are senryu!
Check out my article to see the difference:
http://writinghood.com/style/the-true-haiku-and-its-origins/

Thank you my Friends for your wonderful comments,you arethe reason that I continue to write, and why I wish to grow and improve as a writer.
Adam thank you, I did not know the difference between Haiku and Senryu, I value your input,for I am still, and always shall be, learning to write.
Thank you all
F J McCarthy, aka SPort150 on Stumble upon.

I really enjoyed this and totally agreed with its meaning. Gives us all food for thought.

Love the sea therefore love the poem

I’m with you Frank on so many levels. As poets here on Triond, I thought we were all supposed to be growing and learning in our writing.

The thing I love about Triond is that we can receive reviews and criticism from our peers, but some are a bit too harsh. I for one totally enjoyed this piece, be it haiku or senyru. What a beautiful photo as well. Such an important and relevant topic to write about.

The sea is life and life!
Care of him!
What we would be without the sea?
He feeds us, he gives us abundant rains that our land and water that fill the rivers. Gives a beautiful color to our skin in time for holiday. Finally he takes care of us. What would we without it?

Very interesting read (and comments!). Thanks for sharing.
Haiku ~ senryu? not even familiar to me… good job with your thoughts though…

beautiful. nature lover.

Very interesting & deep poem. Loved it!

I

Beautiful

good stuff

Wow this is nice
I also like the sea much.
I have a cottage near the mediterannean sea in the montenegro.

Sea rules

You brought the sea to life with your haikus. Great job!

Great things come as a mustard seed. I’m amused.

This is beautiful

Great work, this is beautifully constructed

great poem!!!

I liked your writing and the attention you bring to the enviroment. Keep up the good work, stay true to your beliefs and keep on writing…Lowell Henderson

I liked the line “worlds unknown to us.” We never really know everything that is underwater. There are probably thousands if not millions of fish and sea creatures we’ve yet to discover.

Beautiful strong work*

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.

the underwater world is fabulas and your words invisioned it truley beautiful.fantastic write.

Nice work and a beautiful photo.

Your are absolutely correct, we are ruin not only our world but the world of other beautiful creatures.
I love the poem, the photo is lovely.
We all need to wake up and realize we are not the only living beings living here

great images of the vast unknown. FYI, in reading through the comments, Ignatius Reilly certainly stands out, but I think someone is just having some fun with you, or may be cryptically praising you. Ignatius Reilly is a character in one of my favorite novels of all time, a book written by John Kennedy Toole, and I recognize the prose. It was actually a great satire penned by a tortured author, and was published in 1980, 11 years after his suicide.

Ah, yes, the book is titled “A Confederacy of Dunces”

amazing! your words are very powerful. they allow me to create a beautiful picture of the sea in my mind.

That was great! Wow, haiku’s a really hard, but you got it!

Prose and verse has no bounds. Therefore just call it what it is, a reflection of you. Well done

I like this.

Strong, good work*

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.

Very nice work,,,dont know much about this type of writing but I like it.

I have just discovered your owrk, and want to see more.

Beautiful write!

Very nice….

FJ, nice work.
Thanks,
clay

Very very nice!

This was a very good poem
Thanks, i love it

love it, wonderful job!

good job!
you have a good artistic skill.
i cant even compose two line of poetry.
LOL

This is a lovely poem. It’s so sad that because of some people’s selfish interests, they ruin mother nature.

What interests me the most is that you used four haiku as a poem. I think the formating is very interesting.

lovely work..you are absolutely right..humans often forget in their quest of knowledge of all things in the world they are unknowingly hurting mother nature.

Simply elegant!!! Liz

Great!

I really like it

If you like this poem you will probably like mine
its called:

“Waves and Music”

very good message. I am a large proponent for no plastic in the ocean. I appreciate what you are doing.

Good poetry in motion to get the minds of people thinking.

I appreciate your compassion for the creations. I live near three seas and I feel compassion too. I am Newview and I would like to invite you to be a friend.

I love your poem. This is exactly how I feel. Also, the pictrure is awesome!

Lovely atmosphere, a feeling of the dephs,dark and green waters.
No knowledge of mankind above,but suffering because of our ignorance More insights please.

lovely consept come see mine please

nice simple poem with a strong message..

Great imagery, definitely a worthy subject

LOVELY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nice…

very nice.
I do love sea life. :3

Beautiful…

Really good.

Excellent!!

Four part haiku….excellent it flowed so nicely together! bravo

love your poem, do you scuba dive a lot?

Beautiful! Love anything having to do with the sea and this captures it wonderfully!

How does continue to show up on the Hot Content list? I’m sorry FJ, I’m not saying this because I know you hate for who knows why, but this is something a sixth grader could have written in less than five minutes. I’ll not conform to everyone above that leaves an insincere comment on this for the sake of maintaining rapport or the hope of reciprocation of views. I’ll answer the question above myself. This continually makes it on the Hot Content because the system flawed. I would duggest that you could write a haiku about pickles and you marketing strategy, which may or may not be ethically driven, would determine the level of traffic you generate, not quality writing. You, my friend, fall into the category of a terrible writer, but a good promoter. Congratulations on compromising the inegrity of the Triond writing community and SHAME on everyone above that indulges!!

4 sienryu’s strung together is not completely without merit especially with it also being a single complete poem in itself. Although I am not enthralled with the subject matter I think Repucket is a little out of line attacking this poem so ferociously. Obviously most people here enjoyed this poem enough to comment on it and that says all that needs to be said about a poem. If it connects with the audience I would call it a success. Good Job FJ.

Contraty to REPucket’s views, I love your thoughts and the way you choose to express yourself. It is a very simple thing you’ve picked up on, like the sea, and instead of expressing it as this magical source of life, you’ve done a different take on it. I like it!

Great thoughts and awesome picture!

To all my friends-Thank you for all of your comments,I have been taking a break from writing but you have reminded me of the reason I write.The fact that you have read something of mine and found some enjoyment from that reading give me great joy.

To The few who do not like my work for whatever reason,I hope you will continue to search for something that does give you joy.

We are only on this earth for a brief time, and I will spend that time trying to find the beauty and love in life.

Thank you all, Your humble poet F J McCarthy, aka Sport160 on Stumbleupon.

Very nicely done. Thanks for sharing! Good write!

Its a nice poem…. Its so amazing..

I have always been quite intrigued by how separated we are from that of our sea brethren. It is no surprise then how we can easily just overlook the devastation we are causing. Thanks for your efforts FJ.

great work fj

True beauty lies in simplicity. This is a very simple piece – very beautiful indeed!

In regard to REPuckett’s comment,
I bet he secretly clicked “I liked it”.

I thought it was a good poem, but I too am confused, how popular it is. I have been trying to get on the hot content list and have plenty of poems similar to this. They barely get any views.
I’m just surprised by how much people like this one, but regardless you did a great job making this, and an even greater job promoting it.

We love writings about the sea becuse she is a mysterious, magnificent survivor.

great picture

Very nice. One more sea lover. I also write about diving.

Nice work.

Great poem. Like it! Well written.

This poem can be haiku if you can separate the lines every 3 lines. Shift+Enter and Enter can help.