The poem below (a revision of my two star poems) is a lesson on humility in the pursuit of a dream or ambition.

“Touching the Stars”

Tonight I sit alone on top of a verdant hill
Numbering the stars as the world stands still,
Wanting to touch  the natives of heaven
Through a deck sandwiched between God and Eden.

God’s kingdom does not seem far away,
It’s as close as the thoughts I wish to say;
Then, a song dares me to lure the sky nearer
By plucking the stars to hold God closer.

While the antique hill kisses the jeweled sky
I can almost touch the terrified stars nearby;
My puny arm strains to reach their perfection,
And measure God’s thoughts and His creation.

The diamond stars, stubborn to my reach,
Censure  me for my wanton breach:
“We’re in heaven in memory of the sun,
You’re on earth, a copy of the Great One.”

Then, from heaven a soft voice replies:
“Bard of the stars, you can’t work with lies:
If you can number the stars in a dark night
And lure them with a song in their fright,
Build your dreams beneath their lofty height
So My Love will guide you with their light.”

Thus, I ask no more  where stars must glow:
They in heaven, me on earth below;
I can’t have them nearer,
They can’t have me farther.

So I’m back to earth where I belong,
Where Life pours onward like a song:
Where all of mortals will be frozen,
Beneath the twilight soon forsaken. ###







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  • el gringo on Aug 28, 2011

    nice composition :D

  • neopisiva on Aug 28, 2011

    It’s simply beautiful!

  • Dennis N OBrien on Aug 28, 2011

    Nice touch Socorro, you’re a star.

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 29, 2011

    Thank you.

  • Martin Kloess on Aug 29, 2011

    think about it. switch frozen for taken.

  • KittyK on Aug 29, 2011

    Just lovely…

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 30, 2011

    Thank you for the wished for comments.

  • master34leeward on Aug 30, 2011

    what a lovely well written poem

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 31, 2011

    Martin: Nice suggestion, but I thought of frozen as a better poetic choice because the earth is 75% water: we all go down the watery grave and it’s possible that in winter our bodies are frozen. To me frozen conjures a more poetic image than the commonplace word taken.TY, you’re so kind to make me see your viewpoint which is always welcome.

  • Jason Starks on Sep 6, 2011

    I liked it, thanks

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 6, 2011

    Dave and Jason: Thank you for joining us. We are the mutual admiration club.

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 13, 2011

    Dave, thanks for following me.

  • Ram Bansal on Sep 15, 2011

    On this Birthday of yours, I promise, “So My Love will guide you with their light… if you accept it”.

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 15, 2011

    Ram, did you get out from the wrong side of bed?

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 21, 2011

    No one is perfect but we can strive to be perfect.

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