Train to Hackettstown

Sandy Alm on Nov 13, 2011

Tags: Hackettstown, Journey, long distance, love, loving, missing, pain, relationship, train

A poetry dedicated to all loving people who are tough enough to maintain a long distance relationship and brave enough to follow their heart despite all odds. The intention of the writer in writing this piece is to tansform it into a song that will be interpreted by either Reba McEntire or Taylor Swift..Its my dream to write lyrics and who knows…..

Baby it’s a journey

I set aside my fears

Want you to be near me

To cast away my tears

I’m longing for your touch

And feel your kiss again

Just missing you so much

Its driving me insane

So I bravely took this train

To a place called Hackettstown

And relieve this aching pain

That I brought upon my own

Seemingly forever

Not seeing you for long

You came out from nowhere

In me now you’ve grown strong

Afraid to let you know

My life turned upside down

Baby this love for you

Its lifting me from ground

So I’m taking on this ride

Just to follow where you are

Coz I want you by my side

And no matter how too far

Now at last I hold you tight

We’re both locked in warm embrace

Baby what a sweet delight

We’re together face to face

And when all of this is done

I just want to let you know

That one day when I am gone

Baby I just love you so…..

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Comments (17)

Aroosa Gloomy on Nov 13, 2011
Ah gr8 when I miss him I get insane but never had flight lol
Ruby Hawk on Nov 13, 2011
Sweet,
Moses Ingram on Nov 14, 2011
That’s a nice poem.
quiet voice on Nov 14, 2011
…Great verses. Send it to them. But type it up, sign and date it, mail it to yourself and keep it unopened to validate ownership,. Good luck.
Tulan on Nov 14, 2011
very nice.
Eunice Tan on Nov 14, 2011
Well written
lonelyplanet on Nov 15, 2011
Nicely written poem.
Incondible on Nov 15, 2011
Well written, the next Shakespeare or Wordsworth?
yes me on Nov 16, 2011
Liked it cheers
CarolineMG on Nov 20, 2011
nice share,
Yvhes P. on Nov 21, 2011
Nice poem. Thanks for sharing!
The Bling on Nov 21, 2011
I think I can hear the lovely melody in this one. Well done.
Stickinthemud on Nov 23, 2011
I am glad you put at the front of this that you had in mind writing it like a song. I would not have judged it that way otherwise.

Your topic is a good one, so I think you could do well writing lyrics, so long as you mix up your wordings once in awhile, and make everything you say as unique as possible. Lyrics these days have less and less imagination in them, more “baby”s and “soul”s and “passion”s, etcetera. The way to be good at writing lyrics is to write something no one else has written yet. I like your title, but while that is unique, almost every line you wrote is an expression I have heard somewhere else.

Avoid cliches, or use them sparingly. Use a thesaurus. It’s a very handy reference that I suggest EVERY writer gets. Check out my article Too Cliche to learn more…

Thanks for sharing, and have a good day.
sheilanewton on Nov 24, 2011
Superb poem, stated in such a heartfelt way. I loved this.
V rank on Nov 27, 2011
A good start… This is your very first stuff that I visited…
JoniJones on Nov 28, 2011
Nice one
Sahan Serasinghe on Feb 5, 2012
Superb!!

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