Trampled Heart

Pablina on Feb 4, 2010

Tags: devil, hurt, love, pain, tart

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Broken hearted.

A pain lingers deep inside

From a love that I had to hide

You left me here all alone

But too many seeds have been sewn

The day that you left resembled my hell

The Devil had broken our true love spell

And now when I see you with that silly old tart

It’s like someone has trampled on my lonely old heart.

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drelayaraja on Feb 4, 2010
Wonderful..
Anuradha Ramkumar on Feb 4, 2010
A very sad poem.
diamondpoet on Feb 4, 2010
I loved it, it was cute and serious all rolled into one. Good job.
Sushant94 on Feb 4, 2010
same here
Lady Fantasy on Feb 4, 2010
Yep….cute and seriuos at the same time but the perfect blend also.Liked it though and hearts do mend over time.
Guy Hogan on Feb 4, 2010
The pain seems never to go away. I guess if love is real the pain never really goes away.
joyhyena29 on Feb 4, 2010
well done^^
LOVELYHONEY on Feb 4, 2010
COMMON THOUGHTS FOR MANY

GOOD ONE
LHLHLH
Jenilia12 on Feb 4, 2010
very inspiring poem,,.
Mushtaq on Feb 5, 2010
Superb
albert1jemi on Feb 5, 2010
excellent one
qasimdharamsy on Feb 6, 2010
Nice one….
fragile18 on Feb 14, 2010
great!
Jpower on Feb 16, 2010
wonderful.
swatilohani on Feb 24, 2010
touching
Stickinthemud on Mar 19, 2010
I know what that feels like.

I think this one could be a little longer, and the couplets you have should be put together in my opinion. Don’t you have a word processor?

Anyway, good job. Thanks for sharing.
Lady Fantasy on Apr 1, 2010
A seriuos piece but choice of words made this a bit less painful.But time heals most of our wounds though a few painful shards will forever remain.An emotion felt by many that has had a broken heart.
charanjitsingh chandhok on Apr 20, 2010
A story ages old yet fresh to each broken heart
She broke mine he yours irreparable petal each.

A precis of a long last pain experienced in each sad soul ..you have said so much in few words and in a melodious rhythm that echoes thunderously to shake the very walls of hypocrisy.

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