Finding community.

I was looking at the leaves
And I thought about you
Had to rake them up
All but a few.
They had blown my way
Like a message for me
Falling from your trees
Blowing carefully, gently.
Why couldn’t they stay in your yard
I thought
I have plenty of my own
But now yours I have caught.
I was raking the leaves
And I thought about you
So many colors
Shapes, sizes, and hue.
Did you send them to me
Like a message or call
Do you want our friendship
Want to hang at the mall.
But neighbors are not friends
Let’s just keep to ourselves
No sharing, no caring
No life into which we’ll delve.
I was picking up the leaves
And I thought about you
In the leaves was a lesson
That I could not but do.
I have my life
And you have yours
My mower, my fence, my yard
Your ways, your things, yours.
But if the leaves can mix together
Your trees and mine
Then why can’t we be friends
Enjoy the days and the time.
Today is a new day
Yesterday is to bereave
Now all I have to say
Is may I rake your leaves?

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  • Karelee on Dec 2, 2008

    What a nice story and so enjoyable to read. I am lucky as I am friends with both my neighbors but lived in subs where we barely knew their names. This article has so much truth in it. Just for the record Brian… you can rake my leaves all you want. :o )
    Use a leaf blower and spread your new found freindship and warmth throughout your neighborhood. HMMM!! I’m seeing a block party in your honor…
    God bless and keep ‘em coming… Karelee

  • Debra. on Dec 2, 2008

    That was a beautiful piece of poetry, Brian.
    I love the message behind it about friendship.
    Such a clever and inviting piece.
    Thank you for sharing and God bless.

  • weegysgram on Dec 2, 2008

    Wow I loved it, it was great! It sure would be such a wonderful world if every one could get along.

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on Dec 2, 2008

    I’m glad you are finding this poem encouraging. It is a reflection of what was going on in my head yesterday while I was raking the leaves.

    Karelee, you are the one blowing goodness through the streets!

    Debra, you are most welcome.

    Weegysgram, it begins with you and I!

    Brian

  • Darla Smith on Dec 2, 2008

    This is a wonderful and very beautiful poem!

  • Blue Buttefly on Dec 2, 2008

    Beautiful message, awesome poem!

  • goodselfme on Dec 2, 2008

    Lots of emotion to think of things past and how they mean so little at that present moment. Later is when we would have , should have, could have.

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on Dec 2, 2008

    Darla, MJ, and goodselfme, thanks for reading my poem about community. I appreciate it. Brian

  • Countrymom on Dec 2, 2008

    I love this. I rake leaves often and as I rake I watch my neighborhood and how it is so alive with activity. Its great to know ones neighbors and be friends.

  • Lauren Axelrod on Dec 2, 2008

    I never rake. It\’s an overwhelming task in my yard with 6 water oaks. They are of this earth, they naturally dissipate into the dirt. Excellent piece Brian. I added a link at http://www.laurenaxelrod.blogspot.com

  • CHAN LEE PENG on Dec 2, 2008

    Love your poem, thanks!

  • joystick7 on Dec 3, 2008

    Beautiful piece of work!!

  • Joie Schmidt on Dec 3, 2008

    There is an interesting, serene thoughtfulness to this piece. Very nice*

    Blessings.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • Eunice Tan on Dec 3, 2008

    Very poetic. Good description about a community. So sweet.

  • Joshua Miguel on Dec 3, 2008

    Brian, you made a simple scene in your life into a creative poetry. you really are a great poet!

  • eddiego65 on Dec 3, 2008

    Great work! You’ve shown what community should be and what it is not.

  • hfj on Dec 11, 2008

    Good poem with nice flow to it. That is the way it seems to be these days, living next door to someone for years and never getting to know them. Not like the old days when everyone knew everyone.

  • Adam Henry Sears on Dec 15, 2008

    Hi Brian, how are you?
    This turned out to be quite a discourse on the right and neighborly thing to do. I like it a lot. Have a nice day

  • PR Mace on Dec 15, 2008

    Hi Brian,

    Nice to see you back. Excellant poem. I too get ideas for stories or poems at strange times while doing everyday things. I was gone on vacation for a while and now I am back. I am slowly trying to play catch up. See you later, Pam

  • MJ Taylor on Dec 18, 2008

    Hey, your not bad with the poems. This aint bad. There’s someone called ‘feelgoodme’ who also writes nice poetry. It’s good to see people do still appreciate the genre. Take care.

  • Ruby Hawk on Dec 18, 2008

    That’s just great. Isn’t it amazing what comes into your mind to write about. i like it.

  • Jasin on Dec 19, 2008

    Great work, wonderful poem.

  • Dianne on Dec 25, 2008

    Brian, You have an amazing way of expressing. Your poem is so strong with emotion and an invitation. Let’s rake leaves together! Thank you for sharing.

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on Dec 26, 2008

    All of your comments are so encouraging. Thanks so much. Lets rake leaves together, my place, today at 2 PM! Brian

  • Donalee on Dec 26, 2008

    Wow! I really like this poem! I am so glad you rake my leaves!
    Keep ‘em coming and I’ll get the sons out there raking for you!

  • Chris Stonecipher on Dec 28, 2008

    Brian,
    We can rake the leaves together. Wonderfully written poem of reaching out to others for friendship. Sometimes people we see everyday are not the most obvious chose for friends, but the could make good ones.
    Bless you my friend,
    Chris

  • Virginia Wolfe on Dec 31, 2008

    that was touching!

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on Jan 9, 2009

    Donalee, Chris, and Virginia, you guys are cool! Brian

  • nutuba on Jan 9, 2009

    I liked this a lot! Nicely done.

  • Yoda on Jan 25, 2009

    Great piece of poetry. You said in the forum that you’re not much of a poet… but this is amazing. Keep it up!

  • Bertie on Jan 25, 2009

    Great poem. Nice way of putting a personal note into words without sounding boring. You read so many friendship poetry that says the same but this one says \”lets be friends\” in a very different way. I really like it. You got potential and have a way with words…. Bertie

  • Majic on Jan 29, 2009

    I once extended my rake to a neighbor’s yard and his pittbull chased me up to my door! That says a lot about that particular neighbor.

  • Casey Kelley on Jan 30, 2009

    this is beautiful! I absolutely loved it!!!!! btw I am not in class right now =).

  • maranatha on Jan 30, 2009

    Beautiful, expressive poem. I can’t rake leaves, my yard’s all sand. And my neighbors are my in-laws….

    I have some poetry too, if you want to check my portfolio. I don’t think I understand how to advertise it well, though.

  • Katie Marie on May 26, 2009

    Very true of our culture today. Unfortunately sometimes it takes personal tragedy to get us to cross over and become ‘neighbors’ again. A group of us found that last year when one household had to deal with a cancer battle. Two people came to find just how many wonderful people lived and worked around them. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, just discovered your writings.

  • Rebecca Hoppe on May 27, 2009

    Beautiful and inspiring. I wish you were my neighbor.

  • Brian Daniel Stankich on May 29, 2009

    Thanks for all the kind feedback. Too kind! Brian

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