I thought this up kind of whilst watching the fireworks…i had a vision of standing there, people watching fireworks…while my alter (JJ) was surrounded by smoke…hes looking at his red all stars and hes so lost in dissociation that he isn’t really all there…no one notices him either( I guess that’s just how he feels about himself)…but hes happy because hes not feeling the pain of his past…

Puddles disguise the ground

a reflection of nothing i have found

yet everything i am in that very moment

around me all the wonders of the world are bent

twisted rainbow teasing the sky

no one notices me as they pass by

the sky is just raining down

lonely, i stand wearing my frown

as the war washes over us all

under the hypnotic drums we seem to fall

veins trembling and tense

staring down at my soaked shoes, nothing makes sense

lost at the sight of my own breath

how good it feels to have faked my own death

skin rattling to this reality that’s not tight

I’m not really here this very night

sweeped over by a wave of smoke, no hurt any more

none of those old feelings that haunted me before

it is like i have done a vanishing act

and there never was a chance of coming back

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  • suhail on Nov 9, 2010

    how good it feels to have faked my own death – feels really great to be even thinking about it … hmmm…. another craft of feelings , emotions , weirdness and a pinch of madness .. perfect blend !

  • 1Mind on Nov 9, 2010

    Strange…but I like it! Very intriguing, indeed.

  • Christine Ramsay on Nov 9, 2010

    A very poignant and imaginative piece.

    Christine

  • Lord Banks on Nov 9, 2010

    Nice words, not something I have experienced however it does not stop one appriciate what a friend is going through take care. David (LB)

  • Kaye TM on Nov 9, 2010

    very creative poem

  • tami009 on Nov 12, 2010

    i love your work

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