Comments on: Venusian Temple

By: maranatha

maranatha — Thu, 05 Feb 2009 22:26:55 +0000

…Or gods, evidently. This is so artistic, it made me sad. Wherever cunning and self-absorption meet naivete we will find this sort of thing. Well done, Adam. I look forward to rading more.

By: Adam Henry Sears

Adam Henry Sears — Thu, 05 Feb 2009 21:37:09 +0000

Hi, rutherfranc. Thanks for reading! I do appreciate the comments from everyone.

However, rutherfranc: I think you were looking for a deeper meaning when there wasn't one to be had, or at least not one of that nature. Love was not the problem. Love never is. Love in itself is sufficient and perfect. It is flawed people who cause problems for each other and themselves. When Adonis came everything was good and healthy at first, but after he gained Venus' love, he took her for granted, broke her heart, and left her self-will in shards. If she wanted to she could have moved past all that, but she chose not to. Instead she allowed her grief to rule her, and the end-result is what you see. The homeliness and lack of cleanliness is the direct result of her self-deprecation. So, this is not about love, or glory, or splendour, it's about how even the goddess of love can wallow in self-pity to the point that ages later her entire life is still affected by her melancholy... So, thanks for trying to understand the message of the poem, that is appreciated, but please don't blame love for the actions of flawed people.

By: rutherfranc

rutherfranc — Thu, 05 Feb 2009 03:34:19 +0000

If I am getting this right, this is something about glory and pride being laid low because of love.. until love came, splendor reigned but laid low upon it`s arrival and even if it did not worked out, the previous glory cannot be retrieved as it was left in ruins like the temple.

By: Liane Schmidt

Liane Schmidt — Sun, 18 Jan 2009 21:57:40 +0000

Beautiful work*

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.

By: Brent

Brent — Sat, 17 Jan 2009 13:58:24 +0000

Now this is poetry! this is how it should be done, man, with rhymes that look hard but just flow like they were easy. that’s so cool. i’ve gotta try this kind of poem. thanks for everything man.

By: Melissa Ryan

Melissa Ryan — Sat, 10 Jan 2009 04:17:05 +0000

I loved this. Thanks for sharing!

By: 1Mind

1Mind — Tue, 23 Dec 2008 05:34:49 +0000

A true exhibition of talent. The structure is absolutely wonderful! Thank you for sharing!

By: MMV Abad

MMV Abad — Sat, 20 Dec 2008 15:22:34 +0000

Brilliat! A story told in poem.

By: Bren Parks

Bren Parks — Thu, 18 Dec 2008 19:54:51 +0000

very original…nice

By: Yovita

Yovita — Thu, 18 Dec 2008 10:01:52 +0000

Hi Adam, I like the sound of it. You are so good in playing with words. So beautiful!!