Nice write. I like the flow of words .

Good job,
Thanks,
Clay

apt

Hi, Em, how are you?
Well, this is the first of yours that I’ve read, but if this is any indicator of the talent you have, then congratulations because you are doing well with the talent you have. The rhythm is what gives a poem the drive to bring home your message, and you’ve displayed here that you know how to compose metrical verse very well. To top it off, the slight variation of the ballad stanza form that you chose adds to the theme’s impact. Ballad poems have that potential. Great job.

I might encourage you to tweak the arrows rhyme, though. Technically speaking it’s a variation on the wrenched stress rhyme, but it’s one that follows a perfect feminine rhyme, so if you ask me, perhaps another word to match with sorrow?, or perhaps a modified stanza with words matching arrows? Either way, it would improve the sound of that rhyme. If you get stuck for rhymes, use RhymeZone. It may not know how to match thematic words, but with a little intuition you can do that yourself.

Thanks so much for that enjoyable read.

I enjoyed this. It has a nice, natural flow and form.

Nice read