A poem about a girl who is trying to lose some weights!

I talked to my dear friend Chipmunk lately,
about things I should do but I’m just so lazy

I have to exercise,
I do virtual analyze.

I have to jog and run away,
I do enjoy walking through the virtual highway.

My alibi is the time,
but Chipmunk said, “make the time!”

As you see, I even trying to follow the TV trends,
From the biggest ‘writers’ to dancing with the ’stats’.

Let me tell you the truth friend,
an article a day keeps your weight-loss away!

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  • Dreamy777 on May 10, 2011

    great one

  • Cassle Tang on May 10, 2011

    Thanks Dreamy, I am glad you think it is great! I am trying to write poems!

  • neopisiva on May 10, 2011

    Very funny and effective!I will listen to your advice: an article per day…maybe even a few….:)

  • megamatt09 on May 10, 2011

    Very well written and thought provoking work.

  • real lady on May 10, 2011

    This is gunny and lovely. Yeah, Chpmunk is right, make time. I am saying that to myself too. I like the last line. :)

  • CHIPMUNK on May 10, 2011

    If you want to achieve any goal in time and effort is required

  • Ruby Hawk on May 10, 2011

    I understand what you are saying, I did my exercise this morning before I did anything else.

  • Dee Gold on May 10, 2011

    very witty

  • LCM Linda on May 10, 2011

    I smile when I read the last sentence. An enjoyable read.

  • realityspeaks on May 11, 2011

    Ha..Ha..That’s a nice way of putting it. Nice write.

  • pruelpo on May 11, 2011

    You sting me in the last sentence LOL…Love reading it friend.

  • Cassle Tang on May 11, 2011

    @All: Thank you very much for all the comments!! Each of them makes me smile!

    @CHIPMUNK and Ruby Hawk: Thanks so much for keep reminding me the importance of giving lots of efforts! Maybe I should try the same path with Ruby Hawk, by prioritizing my exercise! Should try to get up earlier, then! :)

    @Paul: LOL!! I’m glad that my poem could sting someone! :D

  • Peace Poet on May 11, 2011

    I have often thought of the best cure for obesity. This at times gives me anxious moment. Your concluding line is not only funny but has a deeper meanining.

  • KittyK on May 12, 2011

    You have written a lovely poem and included some humor. Great job!

  • Cassle Tang on May 12, 2011

    @Peace Poet and KittyK: Thanks so much for all the appreciation! :D It is a honor for me to get comments from experts like both of you! :)

  • prasul on May 12, 2011

    This is so cool :) I should learn from your articles :D

  • Muhammad Fajar Marthias on May 13, 2011

    I really enjoy your poem!thanks

  • A.Tawnuh on May 16, 2011

    wow, i think you should try to rap it, cos i dont think that people are really into poetry :D

  • Starpisces on May 18, 2011

    I love this kind of poem, fun, rhyme, and story told. Excellent, keep it up.
    ;)

  • Sushant94 on May 20, 2011

    this is cool! yourway of writing is good!

  • Freethinking on May 21, 2011

    I like the way you think! I always say I would go jogging, but the couch won’t come with me.

  • oncewantobeawriter on May 30, 2011

    hehe..very nice poem. God bless…

  • R K Vajpeyi on May 31, 2011

    Nice one! Enjoyed it!

  • sandynpj on Jun 9, 2011

    ha ha nice buddy

  • Lasaev on Jul 18, 2011

    I love this kind of poem

  • Eunice Tan on Jul 18, 2011

    Practice makes perfect. Anyway sometimes we are indeed lazy.

  • Raj the Tora on Jul 26, 2011

    very nice poem. Thanks for bringing in Chipmunk as well. She’s of great help

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