It came to him so suddenly, that love is full of sacrifice.

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  • payge on Feb 11, 2009

    A very well thought out article and II can relate to it all to well…I loved it!

  • Kate Smedley on Feb 11, 2009

    That kept me completely transfixed to the end, so well expressed and as always your message is direct and true.

  • rutherfranc on Feb 11, 2009

    love is trusting, selfless and your right! full of sacrifices but when you love someone, it doesn`t feel like a sacrifice at all.

  • LOVELYHONEY on Feb 11, 2009

    HONEY, Feb 11, 2009
    the more i read u the less i know what is love

    once i wrote a threesome, no not of sex, but of love ,triond does not permit me to import ,but what i can say with authority is

    ”love as u may but if three words I LOVE YOU you cannot say then i am quite sure one is not fit for love any more
    ur poem attracts fans as bees to honey i would have come to see u all lovers here at triond

    if i had the money to hear ,

    those three words from you,
    so however true ,
    if only to hear you say,
    these resounding words ,
    to ur lucky girl,
    who ur love,
    does deserve

    lovely honey

  • F J McCarthy on Feb 11, 2009

    Lovely once again S A Loved it.

  • miss cornelia on Feb 11, 2009

    Wow, very well written. Though it sounds more like a story than a poem.

  • maranatha on Feb 11, 2009

    What a fascinating poem! And what a dilemna as well. Are you thinking of yourself to want to marry? Is she thinking of herself – monetary gain – to want a prenupt? Reading your work makes me so thankful that my husband and I had the same feelings toward marriage, we didn’t need to consider these questions. Beautiful and thought-provoking.

  • S A JOHNSON on Feb 11, 2009

    It is more of a story than a poem but i couldn’t express it well enough as an actual short story.

    I am not thinking of getting married, in fact, I do not want to ever get married. I told myself though that if I did feel that I loved someone enough I would want a prenupt.

    I am not wealthy by any means, I’m the exact opposite of that actually. However, I would want a prenupt because I would like it to be said that anything we had before we leave with, anything made together we split evenly.

    However, if any children are created, I want full custody, with no alimony or child support and if he wants to continue being in their lives (which I’m sure he would) all that he need to do is continue being a father to them and support THEM when they need him.

    I don’t see the necessity in getting married but I know that if I loved someone enough that I just might bend.

  • nutuba on Feb 11, 2009

    That’s one deep insightful poem! It’s beautifully written and expressed. I won’t pretend to ascribe to the same views, but that’s not the point. This is a very well done poem! It’s clear, it flows well, and it’s an enjoyable read. Nicely done!

  • Yovita Siswati on Feb 11, 2009

    I like the closing line. Great work!

  • K Kristie on Feb 11, 2009

    Yes, love is full of sacrifices. Nice poem.

  • Christine Ramsay on Feb 12, 2009

    A very meaningful poem. There\’s a lot to think about there. Well done.

    Christine

  • S A JOHNSON on Feb 12, 2009

    Thanks for your comments. I know not many people think like me on this topic but since everyone seemed to be out there giving the other point of view I thought I would give mine.

  • Duff D Moss on Feb 12, 2009

    great concluding sentence. I think you’re making me like poetry.

  • LOVELYHONEY on Feb 12, 2009

    this is the second time i am reading this beautiful art
    i love it, a few more words

    ”tomorrow as women do not split hairs with men,
    nor do they marry,
    can anyone think of the mind of future generation,
    in their wombs they carry,
    they will be no more children,
    but beasts of burden,
    and may as well turn out to be,
    without the love of father or mother,
    in real terms human beasts,
    eating up at each another.,

    when you do not want to marry,
    why go through the bother,
    of pain, of agony, nay even caesarian birth ,
    please rethink on my write ,
    if it is any worth.

    from lovely honey. extempore,

    pl correct at your leisure,
    measure for measure,
    and see if it does in correcting it ,
    gives you any pleasure.

    LOVELY HONEY

  • Jo Bingham on Feb 13, 2009

    Nice piece, your poetic message delivered through story. Way to bring it to life :)

  • S Sheehan on Feb 15, 2009

    Wonderful. Very cleverly written. It has me thinking about things now. Thought provoking :)

  • Sandra A Flowers on Feb 18, 2009

    gorgeous poem, I can relate so well,

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