Playing with words for the Writing Challenge # 11: keywords – bad smell and disappointment.

“Something smells bad,” said Mr. Nose.
“And, yes, it’s coming from somewhere close.”

“Can’t smell nothin’,” quipped Mr. Ears.
“But I hear you snortin’ and sniffin’ there.”

Mr. Eyes joined in, “I sure can’t smell.
And I see no garbage or clutter near.”

“Don’t look at me, all three of you!”
Mr. Mouth chided, “Just gargled, you know.”

All four of them, they looked within
And surmised where the bad smell came.

“Ah, you’re such a disappointment, Mr. Brain!
You, and your rotten thoughts, are at it again.”

Mr. Brain cried, “Oh, give me some peace!
Just let me be; mind your own business..”

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  • Diverseblogger on Sep 23, 2009

    Very different and interesting poem Corazon. Love reading your work :)

  • cardy on Sep 23, 2009

    What a fab poem loved it!

  • Darla Cooke on Sep 23, 2009

    Interesting poem for the challenge.

  • giftarist on Sep 23, 2009

    Wow! Very creative, nice one!

  • ceegirl on Sep 23, 2009

    interesting, i love it

  • cutedrishti8 on Sep 23, 2009

    Interesting work..

  • Katie Marie on Sep 23, 2009

    Stickin’ thoughts! Great twist on the bad smell. Good job.

  • duromus on Sep 23, 2009

    Nice!

  • Shirley Shuler on Sep 23, 2009

    Great poem, loved the twist on the bad smell!

  • Tanya Wallace on Sep 23, 2009

    Very creative and original work! Fab job!

  • mystery61 on Sep 23, 2009

    Very different, I liked it!

  • Jane Jane on Sep 24, 2009

    creative and fun to read. nice post.

  • Penggaroo on Sep 25, 2009

    Great poem!

  • Duff D Moss on Sep 27, 2009

    That was terrific. I liked this a lot. Good fun and clever. Well done. Thanks so much for playing in the challenge. I hope you have a crack at the next round too.

  • Theresa Johnson on Sep 27, 2009

    very funny… definately original…great piece for the challenge

  • miraj on Sep 28, 2009

    I really enjoyed this dulce,great take on the words.

  • hfj on Sep 28, 2009

    Nice poem for the challenge. Great use of all the human resources for the poem. well done.

  • oldster on Sep 28, 2009

    Well done Dulce.
    Very unusual.

  • Greg Wolford on Sep 28, 2009

    Really cute poem and a great answer to the challenge.

  • David Crerand on Sep 29, 2009

    good fun poetry! Well done.

  • Brenda Nelson on Sep 29, 2009

    he who smelt it dealt it?

  • maranatha on Sep 30, 2009

    Great fun, and well said! Brought me a good chuckle and some thoughts to ponder as well!

  • wonder on Oct 1, 2009

    Great!!!!!!!!!!!such was the work of your intellect.

  • Virginia B Gaces on Oct 1, 2009

    Nifty poem. Bravo!

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