When the Dawn Claim the Night

Alicia Wind on Mar 26, 2009

Tags: Claim, dawn, night, pain

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A poem I wrote a long time ago.

Two hearts

One night

Two souls

Reunite.

Two breath

Ignite with a kiss

Two pair of eyes

Mesmerized.

Body close,

Touching…

Lingering,

and whispering.

Dawn came

Night has gone

Together with the man

She was uncovered by none

Nothing for her to be done

Only tears,

Pouring rain,

Good memories

And her sweet pain.

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Comments (23)

Daghost413860 on Mar 26, 2009
Very moving…love and tears…like day and night
Annie Hintsala on Mar 26, 2009
What a haunting poem, good job.
Vince Shocker Knight on Mar 26, 2009
I love this poem it sound’d very hot and sexy with your word’s of passionated heat for love.
rutherfranc on Mar 26, 2009
nice swing of emotion once again.. anticipation, fulfillment, rapture… and then pain.. well done Mys..
payge on Mar 26, 2009
This piece carries a broad range of emotions,liked how it was writen.
Debra. on Mar 26, 2009
Wonderfully expressed and display of emotion. Nice choice of words.
Kate Smedley on Mar 26, 2009
Very well expressed and I like the way you’ve structured it very much.
vikram on Mar 26, 2009
touched me dear…

hugs…so true.
Darla Cooke on Mar 26, 2009
Beautiful poem!
Christine Ramsay on Mar 26, 2009
A very touching poem. I like the way it builds to a crescendo and then fades out again.

Christine
Mrs M on Mar 26, 2009
I loved how simple this was yet said so much.
Daisy Peasblossom on Mar 26, 2009
I especially liked the capper lines \”Good memories, sweet pain\”.
QuinMonty86 on Mar 26, 2009
A lot of emotion in very short lines. Loved it.
BC Doan on Mar 26, 2009
Short and sweet!
macon on Mar 26, 2009
Very nice! So many emotions with such simple words!
CHAN LEE PENG on Mar 26, 2009
You’re smart! Simple words to express the flow of your ideas. Good job!
Melody SJAL on Mar 26, 2009
Simply beutiful…Nice structure and flow.
miraj on Mar 27, 2009
exquisitely expressed,those truncated line added the punch the poem needed.

my deepest respect and gratitude,Lyke
LOVE IS ALL

Walk in beauty change the world.
Honesty on Mar 27, 2009
Very, very interesting…
CutestPrincess on Mar 27, 2009
loved this poem…
PR Mace on Mar 27, 2009
Quite touching.
Parish Loveless on Mar 31, 2009
Beautiful piece. I really enjoyed it. The title is awesome too
S A JOHNSON on Apr 8, 2009
Wow, so much complexity with such “simple” words. very well written. I love it.

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