ok gonna sound all gay here for a minute, but that kind of threw me. All ready for one of your dark wonders, and this. it was beautiful, actually. made me ache a little. if this isnt fiction, i hope he finds his way back to you. it reminded me, in an odd sort of way, how grateful i am for my wife. and now im going to go belch to feel manly again.

Thank you kind sir. I do hope you got many belches and a few farts out to help you feel manly once again. I will be back to my normal dark self very soon….

A great composed piece of writing…A bit ‘raw’..hehehe..in some places but we need a bit of ‘erotica’ now and again : ) it helps the world go round…hehehe
Take Care
Marie

Marie Milton- If wet willies constitute Erotica in your world I wanna be there! LOL

The desperation of this poem is sad. I guess your protagonist should not have done wrong! But I think your protagonist came to that conclusion herself. You have definitely captured the “Oh crap I screwed that up” emotion.

This is a beautiful, sad, desperate piece. We’ve all felt it, and anyone who says otherwise is a liar. That’s why it strikes such a responsive chord.

“I know I have done wrong. I know I’ve done a lot wrong….” This gut reaction is so classic it’s scary. Don’t ever take him back on the premise that you are completely to blame. Just wanted to point that out.

Lovely writing that sums up the minutiae of what it means to have someone special and be special to someone, and also the ache and longing of loss. I really enjoyed this.

Thank you all so much for your comments on this. This poem is very special to me and it means a lot for what all of you are saying.

Deep, emotional share with much yearning.TX well done!

great poem, just posted it on http://facebook.com/poetrees

Very nice piece.

Very beautiful. So many people will be able to relate to this, good job.

I love the bittersweetness the piece produced,

Honest love and honest regret. Great write.