Working Morning

tonisan60 on Feb 3, 2009

Cynical everyday poetry.

It’s four o’clock,

coffee is served,
I drink it in just one sip
and then I run to catch the bus,

if I arrive late today I will be fired,
the warnings are already so many
that they do not fit into my personal files anymore,

- one more fault

- I was told -

-one more slide

and you will be lift up
to the unemployed’s hell!

It’s four o’clock in the morning

and my wife; wrapped
in its cocoon silk

- that baby-doll that had cost me an eye of my face -

sleeps …
Would she dream with me?
What matters whose she is dreaming with!
While I still am the gardener
of her plant of hair …

I’d better go
before the cash rolling human cargo

leaves me at foot.

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Comments (7)

Siti Zaida Mikaila aka SZM on Feb 3, 2009
I think you need to be careful about this sentence,”¡and you.”

It supposed to be … “you and I”, right? Perhaps, you only forgot.
tonisan60 on Feb 3, 2009
You are half right, the thing is that ¡ is not I but the exclamation sign, in Spanish we use both of them, the one that opens the exclamation(¡) and the one that closes it (!).
I forgot that in English only is used the one that closes the sentence, I will correct it at once, thank you for the advise. My best regards for you my friend.
Blue Buttefly on Feb 13, 2009
The message of the poem is vivid! keep on writing in English!
eddiego65 on Feb 21, 2009
Great work.
Will Dee on May 3, 2009
Nice flow and message.
coker on May 4, 2009
dont be late!!! nice poem…ah the perils of starting the workday….thanks
p.s. hope you didn’t burn your tongue *S*
Cynthia J on Jul 10, 2009
It’s good to ponder, but hurry up or you’ll be late.
LOL
What an excellent piece of writing.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.

*S* Cynthia

Hi there!