Shock penentrates you whole world and sends it spinning.

I could have heard you crying from miles away

I sat up and I watched the day break

My heart was shattered into pieces

shock comes first before any grieving

You talked me through every step over the phone

My instructions were clear, do not leave him alone

I cannot tell you how it feels to have a loved one slip away

How you can lose everything in just one day

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  • wolffe on Sep 2, 2009

    wow, the raw emotion in this poem through the narrative is nicely done. Good word choices that brings out the power behind the tale.

  • sandie on Sep 2, 2009

    sad poem about losing someone at this difficult time.

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