Inside I feel like…

Another day and my thoughts wonder from pressure
the internal steam is built up above a calculation measure
a quick release from a lose valve
could ignite,a face burn
to those adding another test
without a lesson learned
it`s a shame, but the game is for players
in a world of our own
gun tokers and body slayers
hunting for the need
though greed comes with option
more drugs,leads to
more gun adoptions
shooting more then words
but who`s looking for peace
in it to win it
till the day i am diseased
my life as a ballla….

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Comments (7)
  • Sarah Elizabeth Hume on Jan 29, 2009

    nice work:)

  • rutherfranc on Jan 29, 2009

    another emotional piece.. love the quandary wether to do good or bad..

  • Joe Dorish on Jan 29, 2009

    Interesting piece!

  • spiritwalker on Jan 29, 2009

    This straightforward but well done. A piece of reality.

  • Angie0000023 on Jan 29, 2009

    It was very good. I enjoyed it… Nice job!

  • AC Hamilton III on Jan 30, 2009

    Interesting perspective…provoking..Nicely done!

    AC

  • George W Whitehead on Jan 31, 2009

    Interesting

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