Anyway, I had told them everything. All through Microsoft Word. On the computer. So basically, everyone in the house knows that Sam and I can understand and type English now. Everybody had set up a party for Sam the hero, but it turned out he was going to sleep for some time, so everybody but me went to sleep. I stayed up to tell him that the food on the counter was for him.

I saw out of the corner of my eye, Sam, waking up and looking around. I quietly padded over to the sofa arm and looked up at him. He looked around, and then looked down at me.

“I told them everything, Sam,” I said to him.

“Even our nature?” I heard him sleepily say. It wasn’t something he’d usually say, but I ignored it.

“Yep. Everyone’s asleep now, but I stayed up to tell you that the dog food and biscuits are for you.”

He suddenly looked surprised and alert. “What time is it?!” he asked.

“1:00,” I said.

“Woah. It’s late. Oh well, I’m hungry.” He jumped onto the counter and began to eat. I quietly watched him. It took him no more than 2 minutes to wolf down everything that was for him. Wow, he was hungry.

After eating, he settled down and slept again. Wow, he was tired. But I guess I should sleep too. I walked down the hallway, ran up the stairs, and padded quietly into Jess’ room. I yawned and settled into my bed. Within a few minutes, I was fast asleep.

I think there’s something missing here

What does this mean really? I think if you say something contradictory like this, you sort of have to explain it.

This is a clearer explanation of the contradiction because you used the detail of getting up and forcing yourself to get up, which I can understand.

The past tense of “lie” is “lay”

If Kim is Jess’s cat, she would probably call her Jess’s Mom, right? Would she see everything with Jess as her “main character?”

These kinds of explanations are boring. Is there any way to just work the information into the story without just listing relationships?

Check grammar

repetitive

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This is suddenly in present tense when the whole story is in past tense. Avoid changing tenses in the middle.

This is contradictory. If it doesn’t matter, why can’t she go home?

This whole paragraph is a little confusing. Kim doesn’t sound like the kind of person to think all this stuff. She seems more like a quick-decision maker.

Don’t cats have a great sense of direction?

Remember, don’t change tenses in the middle.

Awesome comment from Kim’s point of view.

And housecats are?

Paw?

You probably don’t need this to explain. I think the line is funnier without it.

Do you mean resistance to tiredness? Or you could say just “resilience,” which means almost the same thing.