A different light on a simple daily task.

A chill ran down George’s spine. He trembled at the thought of leaving his safe-haven. He chanced a glance through the trees thick leaves but did not manage to see anything other then hazy, unfocused shadows. George whisked back towards the tree’s trunk, his heart beating quickly. Roaring booms signaled the presence of the enemy. He knew that a decision had to be made but did not like his options at all. The first more preferable option was to stay here, by the tree, safe and hidden from the danger outside. George knew that this option would be a coward’s way out and did not fancy the thought of retelling a tale in which he had cowered from harms way. The second, most terrifying option was to leave the safety of his tree and head straight into the line of fire. George braced himself to leave the tree and then a nagging thought occurred to him; what about his family who were waiting back at home for his safe return? What would they prefer, for him to be courageous or for him to be alive? George shrank back to the tree trunk, his hands clenched so tightly that his nails made marks in his skin. He wished he had some form of defence but he did not and George was painfully aware of it.

Shivers run up and down his back making him shudder and wind began to whip at his already frozen legs, like it was trying to push him away from the tree. George felt the weight of his decision pressing down on him, he knew that he didn’t want to make his family upset and could therefore not take the second option but he also knew equally well that he could not stay here and cower for much longer, the enemy was encroaching and quickly. Perhaps, George thought clinging to any faint glimmer of hope, the enemy would back off and leave him there unnoticed and safe but he knew that it would be madness to depend on this. He closed his eyes and leaned his head back on the trees rough trunk suddenly feeling like a small fish in a big pond. Seconds trickled past; George could feel the strain of carrying such a tough choice upon his scrawny shoulders.

A loud, terrorizing howl swept through the tree’s armour of leaves making George jump and pressing his decision on him. The howls began to creep closer and grew more violent with every inch. George felt his train of thought run off its rails and thoughts began to swim past unsystematically. Panic set in. His whole body began to shake. The tree appeared to be feeling the same sensation as George and began to swing like a pendulum; George felt sorry that it was rooted to the ground and could not escape the adversary as easily as he could. The noise became unbearable, the wind bellowed and the tree’s roots were creaking. George came to a decision. He summoned the diminutive amount of courage his body possessed and ducking under the trees armour, George ran.

Pellets flew at him instantaneously; violently attacking his arms and making him wish that he had escaped when his foe had been further away. George could hear his feet thumping against the ground with every step; he put his head down and sped up. His lungs would surely burst if he did not stop running soon but he knew that he couldn’t stop yet; the enemy was still attacking with full force. George glimpsed his tree waving to him in the distance; he waved back still darting through the enemy’s fire. Wind blew into his eyes making them burn not that he would be able to see much through the blur surrounding him. Finally the outline of a building, George felt the terror that had enclosed his heart only seconds before disappear. He dashed up the stairs leading to a large wooden door, arms, lungs and legs numb. Two knocks later the door creaked open.

“George!” A tall woman with dark hair exclaimed. “Didn’t I tell you to bring an umbrella this morning?!”

“Yes, mum…” George said defeated while being shoveled inside the house making the floor sopping wet. Lightening and thunder crashed triumphantly, a chill ran up George’s spine, he sneezed. The weather had won, again.

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  • Darlene McFarlane on Sep 9, 2007

    You my dear Lucy are a wonderful writer. Your stories pull me inside every time I read one and this one is no exception. I had my heart in my mouth and could feel the cold rain lashing against me as I hid in the woods with poor George. The ending was a complete twist and totally unexpected.

    Good work!

  • francie on Sep 9, 2007

    Now, we are all up early and looking for a good story, checked out our frequently visited faves and came upon ‘Battle against the storm’. I read it out loud, we hung on every sentence wondering what was going to happen next, what decision George would eventually come to. As Darlene said earlier, we felt our hearts beating faster with every new scene you presented. Finally we were able to breathe comfortably when George reached home. It took us from fear back to sighs of relief at the end. We are now pondering if a deeper lesson is to be learned. Great story, we wished for more. I think it’s supposed to be that way!
    Thanks and you write So very well.

  • RAB on Sep 9, 2007

    As mom said we really loved your story, you told it very well.
    I’m glad to be home to catch up on your work. This was a real
    welcomed surprise!

  • beauley, Lucien on Sep 9, 2007

    Well, Lucy, what are you doing writing short stories? Now, everyone is holding their breath, wondering what will happen next. Darlene, Francie and RAB probably said it all, but I have to add that the descriptive words you used paint a picture. I can’t wait for your next writings. Wow! It will take a while to become calm again. You have a golden pen.

  • Nicholas Kenney on Sep 9, 2007

    Awesome story! Kept me on the edge of my seat throughout. What an ending, I’m envious!

  • shaun ashcroft on Sep 12, 2007

    Well done Lucy…ditto to the above. Loved the twist as I was really wondering where it would go. Thanks for bringimg it safely home.

  • Matthew Newport on Sep 13, 2007

    Wow. That was intense. Extremely well-written. I couldn’t stop reading. Great!

  • Onflame on Sep 13, 2007

    This story was absolutely incredible. The ending was really something I hadn’t even imagined. Do keep writing such awesome ones.

  • C A Johnson on Sep 13, 2007

    This is a very good story. You did a great job with it. :)

  • Lindi on Sep 16, 2007

    Hi Lucy,

    What a fantastic short story! I love the descriptive words you use and the content is captivating with a great surprise ending!

    Very nice! Write on!

  • Gail Nobles on Sep 18, 2007

    Great story!

  • Nick Kenney on Sep 21, 2007

    Your words have drawn me back for a second time! I can’t get this story out of my mind, I just LOVE it!
    Also a heartfelt and sincere thank you for all your kind words about my stories. I am honored. Nick Kenney

  • Jessica Fike on Sep 23, 2007

    I too have come back to read this story for the second time.
    The title is great as well as the story!!!

  • lizzie2uk on Sep 27, 2007

    Great story.

  • Nick Kenney on Oct 7, 2007

    Yep, I’m back for the third read. You absolutely must get this one published, Lucy!! I want the first autographed copy,too.
    You gave me the idea for “The Trouble With Harry”, and I didn’t realize until now that my main character’s name is also “George”. I’m sorry, Lucy, I certainly didn’t mean to copy from your story. Although, duplication is the truest form of flattery. Am waiting for your next one…

  • Ruby Hawk on Oct 15, 2007

    A very interestion story, good job.

  • R.B. Parsley on Oct 26, 2007

    Lucy, I read your story. Its really good. The ending is superb. I love surprise endings with a twist. This is the best yet!

    Oh! before I forget. If you think Lonely Heart made you want to cry, read Nobody’s Hero and let me know what you think!

  • Judy Sheldon-Walker on Dec 3, 2007

    You truly have a knack with words. Beautifully written. Thank you.

    I too, am looking for you on the book shelves.

  • paul crawford on Dec 14, 2007

    Lucy, you took me to war, you took me to the wilds with a wolfpack, you took me to a paintball game, you made me recall many fearful moments in my life, and then you took me home.
    What a fabulous mind you have. keep on writing, even though you titled it, Battle against the Storm, I thought that was just an analogy and travelled everywhere but through thunder and lightening.

  • Glynis on May 23, 2008

    Lucy what a great read, I loved it!

  • willi3d35 on Nov 11, 2008

    Awesome! you had me moving in a different direction.what a cool twist!

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