"You’re not real. You’re not real. You’re not real."

“Stop right there, Mary!”   It called out.    But Mary recalled the Professor’s words not to stop at any cost and she knew subconsciously that this was a life and death situation.  Every step she took, there should be no mistake whatsoever.  And so, she ignored the dark figure and continued walking, saying out to herself,

     “You’re not real.  You’re not real.  You’re not real.”  Mary was now right upto the figure and dared to see it at close range.  Although it was the dead of night, the figure was indeed just a figure.  A dark one, completely blank from inside.  Perhaps some kind of guardian, trying to stop her from entering her destination.  She closed her eyes tightly and continued walking forwards.

     “Nooooooooooo!!!”  It was the figure, crying out as Mary walked right through it.  She re-opened her eyes and found herself well past it.  Although she wanted to look back, she didn’t.  The water was now falling alot faster and it was then that Mary discovered its source.  It was rain.  But not ordinary rain at all, for the drops were a bright red.  By now it was getting hotter and hotter and she saw a large dark opening before her.  And once again, perhaps for the last time, she mentioned the full riddle once more,  to make more sense of it as well as to reassure herself.

     “Beyond the dark trees and past the shining lake is where you will find…”

     “Me!”  A familiar voice called out.  She had heard this voice before and as she was about to enter inside, something completely unexpected happened.  The owner of the voice came out the opening to reveal himself.

     “N…no, it must be…a dream.  I’m dreaming, I just know I am.”   For there before her, stood none other than her ‘late’ husband John Werming.

     “Now, you really can stop walking, Mary.”  Mary stood speechless and uncontrollable tears ran down her eyes.  

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  • carissimi on Oct 14, 2010

    great share!

  • cmanjuc on Oct 14, 2010

    Nice Share

  • gb1269 on Oct 14, 2010

    never ending story..

  • Sweety on Oct 15, 2010

    Great uneding story. You must lool forward to publish these as books. Loved reading it.

  • Sangeeta Chaudhary on Oct 15, 2010

    Ah! Very suspenseful story with twist at the end. Such type of stories remain attraction for readers forever you must get it published.Technically it is ambiguous ending in which reader is awestruck at the end and didn’t get writer’s actual plan and boggle his own head to conclude. Very well ploted and clear in characterisation. I liked it through and through Rajeev. Waiting for the next one.

  • Noeal V on Oct 15, 2010

    Nice Share.

  • AshleyApathy on Oct 15, 2010

    thank you for the share comment my articles back sometime :)

  • pearl2010 on Oct 15, 2010

    Good post to read. Thanks for this.

  • addjust on Oct 15, 2010

    magnificent.

  • Luna Morena on Oct 15, 2010

    You leave me shoked. What a suspense Rajeev. Wonderful work.

  • Kaye TM on Oct 15, 2010

    very nice story. getting better and better now

  • researchanalyst on Oct 16, 2010

    great story line, it will take me a long time to read through them all.

  • Sharif Ishnin on Oct 17, 2010

    I’m glad I followed the whole series. Brilliantly written and I enjoyed every episode. Questions remain as to where and who Mary is with now. That’s the best part about your story Rajeev. As a reader I’m lead from one intense scene into another and that kept me fascinated and interested to discover more. Your build up and style of writing is just right for a writing site like this. If you are writing more stories here, please continue using this awesome technique. Well done my friend.

  • aleah on Oct 17, 2010

    wow, this is riveting. i’ll find time to read from the first chapter. maybe you could compile it into an ebook?

  • Abhipray Sahoo on Oct 17, 2010

    Great! Are you a novelist? You should try writing an e-book!

  • wonder on Oct 19, 2010

    You have built up unusually descriptive circumstances all over. They were nature pure, as are most of your work; simple and went very well with the story, and we rode along with the adventure.The ending was great, or does it end here? It leaves us something to keep guessing-it is open ended.Few write these kinds of pure stories now a days.

  • CA Johnson on Oct 19, 2010

    That was a great end to a fantastic story. As I said, I had a theory and I thought that John was really alive, but I had no idea that it would be like that. I really loved your story. I thought it was great that you added the twist to the story. I love to read stories with great twists in them.

  • AshleyApathy on Oct 19, 2010

    thanks

  • mahajan on Oct 21, 2010

    nice work

  • Tulan on Oct 21, 2010

    Interesting and very descriptive.

  • Brewed Coffee on Oct 21, 2010

    I think I may have to start with the first of the series to understand it more. This is quite interesting!

  • panjettan5 on Oct 22, 2010

    nice work…

  • Shinta2305 on Oct 23, 2010

    Good article…i like it, thx for you’re share :)

  • 1hopefulman on Oct 24, 2010

    Quite an ending! Is the nightmare over or just beginning?

  • Sunjhini on Oct 25, 2010

    well written.. the story is turning out real well… loved the suspense/

  • Sunjhini on Oct 25, 2010

    well written.. the story is turning out real well… loved the suspense

  • xyz999 on Nov 27, 2010

    What a suspenseful and thrilling story. You narrate well. I must read this from the beginning.What a fantastic share.Thank you for this great adventure.

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