The Bhopal disaster claimed thousands of lives, Abhay Agni Devadas is about to claim a few more.

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           The clock on the wall clicked another second in the last half hour of Abhay Agni Devadas tragic life.  It was now 2:00 pm on Wednesday December 3rd, 2014.  An insignificant date for most Americans but one they would remember after today.  Abhay was certain his attack would be seen as a terrorist attack, blamed on another enemy of his people the damn Muslims.  The American Media probably would never be smart enough to connect the dots and he doubted the FBI would search far beyond the note he had left, Americans were lazy, stupid, arrogant and vulnerable. 

                30 years ago Abhay was the 12 year old son of a hardworking man in Bhopal India.  His father a brilliant engineer had worked for Union Carbide and the Government of India.  His father had warned his co-workers, his supervisors, and a government official all about the danger that lurked within the pesticide plant.   He had gone so far as to stage a hunger strike trying to get anyone to listen to him.  His pleas fell on deaf ears.  Abhay’s mother tried to convince his father to quit, so they could move the family away but his father had said if he wasn’t there the plant would certainly explode.  Other engineers walked off the job but Abhay’s father felt if he left, the incompetent supervisor who had shut down rather than repair even the most basic safety systems would certainly cause a disaster. 

           The pipes were no longer being properly cleaned.  The burn off furnace in the flare tower had quit working and his supervisor had refused to allow him to order the necessary parts for repair.  His father had also been desperately trying to repair the gas scrubber, a device which neutralizes escaping poisonous gas, He was even staying late and working on it after hours because he felt it was so important, but after 4 ½ months of constantly being pulled off the project for production issues he had finally decided that it was too dangerous for the family to live so close to the plant.  He had sent his eldest son Abhay to live with his brother in New Delhi and was planning to relocate his wife and baby daughter as soon as arrangements could be made with some other family members.

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  • Used to be Shelly on Sep 11, 2009

    WOW, Brad. That’s it, wow.

  • raman13 on Sep 11, 2009

    You wrote an another interesting article that impressed me

    Keep the good work on

    Best Regards

  • Ronne on Sep 11, 2009

    nice work brad,

  • I Have Had Enough on Sep 11, 2009

    Great story Brad, I especially like the fictional chemical Methyl Isocyanate. lol

  • cafftee on Sep 11, 2009

    Gripped again, great story, great twist at the end.

  • Tlchimes on Sep 11, 2009

    I’m gonna second Shelly… WOW….

    When you write your book, let me know. I will want a copy.

    The details are amazing. The ending was great and had a great moral tone.

    Just wow.

  • Dena McCusker on Sep 11, 2009

    wonderful write and great ending! thumbs up

  • miraj on Sep 11, 2009

    Well brad,

    I don’t know where to start from,It was a chilling account no doubt,
    I can tell you wrote it from a chaotically neutral perspective,balancing both the emotions of the protagonist,his love for his country,and the little minor detail of the innocent Americans(eg. Ted stevens was was married to jennifer stevens who was diagnosed with a breast cancer)with cadence.

    But from an Indian perspective,I accept the twist in the end with a little grudge,yet I know your intention for this was to augment the tragedy.And I liked the part of his mother spitting on the face to despise his vile act,you have captured the essence of an Indian immaculately,we are peaceful individuals by nature but if provoked we can become as fierce as a tiger.

    This story is a lesson for Humanity,and it calls forth the universal law of cause and effect.Impeccable in detail.This is simply a masterpiece.

    A few added praises:-

    awesome name choice of the protagonist(Abhay-fearless)

    Thanks for mentioning Tom clancy he is my idol.

  • oldster on Sep 14, 2009

    Another great yarn Brad.
    Unfortunate twist–could have killed him twice.

  • Rod Ferrandino on Sep 15, 2009

    Very cohesive, and you kept to your time-lines, which is tough when the work is as involved as yours.
    Ditto earlier comment regarding book reservation.

  • Darla Cooke on Sep 15, 2009

    Wow! An amazingly great story!

  • Duff D Moss on Sep 15, 2009

    Far out – the department of homeland security will be keeping a close eye on you now (or perhaps employing you). A well crafted and descriptive story, with some nice little punches – like father of three with a wife diagnosed with cancer.

    Great entry for the challenge bloke.

  • hfj on Sep 16, 2009

    Tremendous. What a story and plot my friend. You should sell this to Hollywood. I\’m sure they could make a movie out of it with the lead actor being Van Diesel. Great entry for the challenge my friend. A novel. Well done.

  • hfj on Sep 16, 2009

    Tremendous. What a story and plot my friend. You should sell this to Hollywood. I\\\’m sure they could make a movie out of it with the lead actor being Van Diesel. Great entry for the challenge my friend. A novel. Well done.

  • REPuckett on Oct 2, 2009

    Fantastic, Brad. Duffy is absolutley correct. I’ll be watching you for a while. lmao

  • XXElleXX on Oct 3, 2009

    This was an explosive read..and the storytelling was outstanding Brad O’Neil! Reminds me of the poisnous gas attacks in Japan..can’t remember whether the gas was Methyl Cyanide or Sarin (nerve gas). You went above and beyond the call of this challenge Brad..unforgettable mate :-)

  • VJ Reddy Bhogala on Oct 31, 2009

    gud one matey
    took me 16 mins to read this,
    though am a quick reader, i jus imagined th whole fin in reality and got involved in it
    nice work
    cheers

  • BullwinkleMuse on Mar 16, 2010

    Sorry I missed this one. It’s tightly written; great detail and pacing. In case you haven’t read him before, I recommend checking out a few works by Nelson DeMille, one of my favorite authors for this sort of writing. “Mayday”,”Cathedral”, “The Lion’s Game” for starters. I think you’d love his stuff.

    re “Cathedral”: DeMille had approached the Catholic Diocese in NYC with the premise that he was writing a book on the architecture of cathedrals around the world and wanted to include St. Patrick’s in Manhattan. The details he’d gained from getting them to share blueprints were the genesis of the novel he’d actually been planning. In it, an IRA team takes the cathedral hostage on St. Patty’s Day. The plot was so well-conceived that the NYPD quadrupled security for the St. Patrick’s Day Parade following the book’s release.

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