Short story of a short romance and a promise to renew. Photos by the author..

It started out to be a beautiful August Saturday then, BOOM, lightning flashed, thunder rumbled across a darkening sky and the rain came.   Weekend shoppers scurried for shelter as did two strangers who would meet for the first time.  The handiest cover was the canvas awning of a sidewalk cafe where one table for two remained vacant.

                                                

“Hi.  I’m Jim,” stranger one said to stranger two, extending his hand.  “I’ve lived here all my life and know everybody in town but I don’t know you so I guess you’re either a tourist, here on business or just passing through.”

She did not accept his hand but rather fished her compact from her purse and checked her hair for rain damage.  Oh, Lord, he’s going to talk my ear  off, she thought to herself.  “My name’s Jennifer.  I’m here with a church group from South Dakota on a missionary  campaign.  I’d heard of the antique shops in town and thought I’d do a little window shopping on my own.”

Jim mulled that over in his mind.  She didn’t look churchy.  She was beautiful with shoulder length dark hair and a body that could have modeled unmentionables.  “Sounds pretty heavy.  I guess even missionaries get the weekend off, huh?”  He ordered two iced teas while the weather continued its outrage and prevented Jennifer’s escape.

She sipped her tea while Jim did most of the talking, explaining that he was a free lance journalist who made his living from the state as a nuisance alligator trapper.  That got her attention.

“What in the world is that?”  she asked, half thinking it was a gag of some sort.  She  caught herself thinking he was petty good looking in his khaki outfit and suddenly did not mind if he wanted to talk.

Jim explained that he would be called upon from time to time to remove alligators from porches or patios or parking lots and relocate them to a river or swampy area where they would not get into trouble with humans.  The rain began to slacken and the iced tea was about to run dry.

The sun broke through the clouds as quickly as the rain had begun earlier and the couple walked the sidewalks of the small town, looking in windows and marvelling at the murals.   Jennifer found herself feeling oddly comfortble in the company of this man she had met only an hour earlier.

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  • Sarah Sullins on Aug 27, 2009

    Great story! It was so sad at the end. I guess I was hoping for happily ever after, but it made the story more realistic. :) loved it, can’t wait for more of your stuff.

  • unown971 on Aug 27, 2009

    Nice story! 5 out of 5!

  • Kate Smedley on Aug 27, 2009

    You never know, they might have made it!! Sweet and romantic story with a healthy dose of reality to finish!

  • Hugo La Rosa on Aug 27, 2009

    Great story! You should write short stories more often. You write them very well.

  • Jenny Heart on Aug 27, 2009

    Well I agree with Kate. They may have met. Happily ever after does work sometimes if the feelings are real enough.

  • ceegirl on Aug 27, 2009

    i like the story

  • Christine Ramsay on Aug 27, 2009

    That was such a romantic story and so well written. I loved it.

    Christine

  • Ramalingam on Aug 27, 2009

    A nice story and I wish they again meet in the next year in the same place.Thanks for sharing.

  • Lady Sunshine on Aug 27, 2009

    Is this based on a true story? :P

  • nadinesimone on Aug 27, 2009

    Captivating! How you manage to condense so much feeling, emotion, and irony into such a short a short piece. You actually walk the reader through the story!

    Thank you.

    Nadine

  • Goodselfme on Aug 27, 2009

    I like happy endings, but life is not like that.Good compostion from you.tX

  • willie wondka on Aug 27, 2009

    ooohhh you torment, in real life that wouldn’t have happened, you old rascal, lol.

  • PR Mace on Aug 27, 2009

    Did you ever see the movie, ” Same TIme, Next Year”? This kind of made me think of that. Excellent story, I am on a short break at work and you made my day better. It has been a really bad day so far.

  • Zappy on Aug 27, 2009

    Ken
    Deep! Really deep! I mean you’re strolling the bottom of sea, Jock-who-stow is about to turn over! You didn’t miss a beat, I mean-thought. My pencil and pen is getting nervous I feel like a Kindergardener. Great Story! I’ll pass on my opinion at this time.

    Zappy,

    P.S. If it was winter I think I would step outside for a minute.
    Wooo.

  • Tanya Wallace on Aug 27, 2009

    Brillant work as always Ken! I loved the ending because it was sad,not the normal ending where they live happily ever after,very original and creative! I always look forward to reading your work, always interesting, written well,very creative and most of all brilliant endings, they bring the whole thing home! lol one of your many fans. Tan

  • Daisy Peasblossom on Aug 27, 2009

    Good story–ouchy ending. But it fits.

  • ducroisjosef on Aug 27, 2009

    Great story Ken. I can’t believe it ended like that. I guess that’s how you can tell that it was good, when it leaves you feeling a little upset it means that you’re invested.

  • Lostash on Aug 28, 2009

    Do I detect a trace of truth in this story Ken???

  • chantell on Sep 19, 2009

    Interesting story. :)

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