Short story of a short romance and a promise to renew. Photos by the author..

“There’s not much to do in this berg,” Jim advised his new companion, “but there’s stuff to see if you’re interested.  We have a beautiful botanical garden just minutes from here.  Wanna go?”

She nodded and they headed for Jim’s C-5 and for the next few hours wandered along wooded paths filled with tropical flowers from all over the world.  Once their hands brushed and Jennifer thought to herself that if he was to take her hand she would not withdraw it.  He did not.  The carillon rang out six p.m.

“Gettin’ hungry?”  Jim asked.  ”I know a great little seafood joint with a deck right out over the lake and ambiance like you wouldn’t believe.”

“Let me make a call,” Jennifer replied, as she telephoned her hotel roommate to explain her absence.  “I don’t want my people to worry about me.”

Their eyes met more than once over dinner of broiled shrimp and crab cakes and the young woman from South Dakota was feeling something more than ambiance–something she had not felt for a long time. 

They slowly sipped an after dinner drink while listening to a girl sing Joan Baez folk ballads.  The mood could not have been more romantic and then it began to rain again.  Jim’s cabin was conveniently within walking distance.  Jennifer made another call.

The next morning dawned sunny and bright and Jim had breakfast nearly on the table as Jennifer came out of the shower.

“Mornin’ Sunshine,”  sleep well?”  Jim asked with a big southern grin.
“You know I did when you finally let me,” she replied, yawning and stretching.  “I know this is the oldest and corniest cliche’ in the world, but, was it good for you, too?He laughed.  “The old ones are the best ones.  Soups on.  Come and get it.”He didn’t answer, she noted, how odd.When they finished eating the couple drove back to town and walked hand in hand around the park’s lake.  They didn’t talk much except to say how quickly the weekend had sped along and how happy they were to have met one another.                                                    

Back near her hotel Jim and Jennifer embraced beneath the town clock, then a quick goodbye kiss.”Here’s the deal,” Jim told her.  “You folks make this trip every year, right?  So lets make a pact.  Next year on the fourth Saturday of August at 10 a.m. you and I will meet under this clock.  Promise?”"I promise,” she promised.It was an easy promise to make.  Each of them knew the other would not be there.

                                                                                             

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  • Sarah Sullins on Aug 27, 2009

    Great story! It was so sad at the end. I guess I was hoping for happily ever after, but it made the story more realistic. :) loved it, can’t wait for more of your stuff.

  • unown971 on Aug 27, 2009

    Nice story! 5 out of 5!

  • Kate Smedley on Aug 27, 2009

    You never know, they might have made it!! Sweet and romantic story with a healthy dose of reality to finish!

  • Hugo La Rosa on Aug 27, 2009

    Great story! You should write short stories more often. You write them very well.

  • Jenny Heart on Aug 27, 2009

    Well I agree with Kate. They may have met. Happily ever after does work sometimes if the feelings are real enough.

  • ceegirl on Aug 27, 2009

    i like the story

  • Christine Ramsay on Aug 27, 2009

    That was such a romantic story and so well written. I loved it.

    Christine

  • Ramalingam on Aug 27, 2009

    A nice story and I wish they again meet in the next year in the same place.Thanks for sharing.

  • Lady Sunshine on Aug 27, 2009

    Is this based on a true story? :P

  • nadinesimone on Aug 27, 2009

    Captivating! How you manage to condense so much feeling, emotion, and irony into such a short a short piece. You actually walk the reader through the story!

    Thank you.

    Nadine

  • Goodselfme on Aug 27, 2009

    I like happy endings, but life is not like that.Good compostion from you.tX

  • willie wondka on Aug 27, 2009

    ooohhh you torment, in real life that wouldn’t have happened, you old rascal, lol.

  • PR Mace on Aug 27, 2009

    Did you ever see the movie, ” Same TIme, Next Year”? This kind of made me think of that. Excellent story, I am on a short break at work and you made my day better. It has been a really bad day so far.

  • Zappy on Aug 27, 2009

    Ken
    Deep! Really deep! I mean you’re strolling the bottom of sea, Jock-who-stow is about to turn over! You didn’t miss a beat, I mean-thought. My pencil and pen is getting nervous I feel like a Kindergardener. Great Story! I’ll pass on my opinion at this time.

    Zappy,

    P.S. If it was winter I think I would step outside for a minute.
    Wooo.

  • Tanya Wallace on Aug 27, 2009

    Brillant work as always Ken! I loved the ending because it was sad,not the normal ending where they live happily ever after,very original and creative! I always look forward to reading your work, always interesting, written well,very creative and most of all brilliant endings, they bring the whole thing home! lol one of your many fans. Tan

  • Daisy Peasblossom on Aug 27, 2009

    Good story–ouchy ending. But it fits.

  • ducroisjosef on Aug 27, 2009

    Great story Ken. I can’t believe it ended like that. I guess that’s how you can tell that it was good, when it leaves you feeling a little upset it means that you’re invested.

  • Lostash on Aug 28, 2009

    Do I detect a trace of truth in this story Ken???

  • chantell on Sep 19, 2009

    Interesting story. :)

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