He went to bed alone, always dreaming about those blank, lifeless… No, those eyes were still very much vibrant and full of life. He repeated this to himself over and over.

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           Breakfast in hand, he unlocked the cellar door. He marched down the stairs, humming a cheery tune. He would get to continue his work, and he would finish today. He would paint it all from memory while she sat and enjoyed her breakfast. She’d been so good to him lately, she hadn’t moved an inch. He’d stared at her enough over the years they’d been together, and even long before then too. It was about time that she watched him work. He could paint her from memory, and it would be perfect, and beautiful. Just like her.

 

            After long hours of hard work and toil he’d finally finished her portrait. Even her eyes. They sparkled with life as they stared locked on his. She smirked, that unmistakable half-smile of hers that he loved so. He almost wept over the very sigh of her, he’d perfected it. Finally, he looked up to see her, and caught those blank eyes. Why did she look at him this way?! Why couldn’t she be like she used to! He wanted her back! But no matter how much he yelled at her all she would do is stare. She didn’t care. He would show her to care. He slapped her straight across the face. Her head twisted sideways, and he immediately felt sorry. He held her tight and apologized over and over. Then he looked at her in the eyes again. They were still so indifferent. He had to make her care again! He started beating on her. All over her body she took punches and blows, but nothing would make that cold stare change.

 

            He became frightened of her. His love, his princess, how could she frighten him so? She was not who he remembered her to be. He quickly took his only finished portrait of her upstairs as not to let it be corrupted by her. He hung the portrait on the wall of his bedroom and admired her. But he could not be happy sitting there knowing she was downstairs. That girl; her body so cold, her face so pale. Down below he knew she was there, veins run dry, vacant eyes. He had to get rid of her. That demon surrounded by eyeless portraits of herself. He could not keep that thing in his cellar.

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  • Aleena on Oct 20, 2009

    If you’re wondering about the title it was supposed to be Cellar Door ll, but apparently Trion doesnt allow two capital Is to follow each other :\

  • LoveDoctor on Oct 20, 2009

    Excellent story part 1 and 2. Well-written, vivid imagination and good imagery. I enjoyed both parts. “Those eyes staring back at him.”

  • Atanacio on Oct 20, 2009

    I like this side of your writing style :)

  • Hollywood James on Oct 21, 2009

    Excellent!!! Keep going with it…this is really some great material. You definitely have great talent and creativity. Fantastic imagination!!!!

  • mathurans on Oct 21, 2009

    Nice Part 2

  • johnnydod on Oct 21, 2009

    Well part two was well worth waiting for, I am writing a book at the moment and I know just how much time it takes,
    well done Aleena I enjoyed this so much and now I know just what it takes to write the likes of this.
    Keep up the good work and more power to your pen.

  • giftarist on Oct 21, 2009

    That was great.. Really like this!

  • cutedrishti8 on Oct 21, 2009

    Vert well written Aleena..

  • ken bultman on Oct 21, 2009

    Excellent short story. Had all the components…begining, middle and end. Well plotted and written.

  • Sourav on Oct 21, 2009

    Nice write… you’ve a good skill of writing stories.

  • cardy on Oct 21, 2009

    Fab fab story keep it up, a really good write from you.

  • chantell on Oct 21, 2009

    Great story

  • Avaxier on Oct 21, 2009

    Great story, you’re really good at this. Both parts are so scary and exciting, I love it!

  • Aleena on Oct 21, 2009

    Thanks guys! Really means a lot to me to see all your comments :)

  • Papa Sparks on Oct 26, 2009

    Really like your attention to detail in this one as well as the way it reads.

  • DGFRANK123 on Nov 7, 2009

    Wow! nice

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