He went to bed alone, always dreaming about those blank, lifeless… No, those eyes were still very much vibrant and full of life. He repeated this to himself over and over.

 

            He ran down the stairs and went to his garage. Gasoline, matches… Now he was ready to pay that girl in his cellar another visit. He unlocked the cellar, and walked down the stairs. He soaked her and her portraits in gasoline, and was about to light the match but… Her eyes. Always her eyes. They kept staring at him. They were always staring at him, locked on him. Accusing him. Always! That’s how it had been from the very start! She was accusing him of… Of… No! He lit the match and threw it at her. She caught fire, everything burst into flames, and he ran up the stairs. She would not escape, she was not allowed to. He locked the cellar door.

 

            He returned to the beautiful creature that he has masterfully created on canvas. He stared at her beauty in wonder. Truly, he was stuck in perfections gaze as the pretty girl looked down on him. He was transfixed, he forgot about the rest of the world. He ignored the rising temperatures, what did a little heat matter, he had her. He ignored the burning sensation in his body. He did not need a body, all he needed was her. He ignored the pain; he would suffer for eternity if it meant he would be allowed to stare at her. What he could not ignore were the flames licking at her feet. He reached out to try and put them out, and her whole body was set to flames. He tried to put the fire out again, but every time he touched her the flames just sprang higher. He’d cursed her, he was sure of it. How could he destroy the only thing he’d ever loved? He watched as the painting crumpled and burned to the ground. He was reunited with what little sanity he had left. That was just a painting. What had he done to the love of his life, the real girl who the painting was based on? He realized he was burning, but what was a broken man to do? He didn’t care. He would burn in life, he would burn in death. He would pay for what he had done to his love.

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  • Aleena on Oct 20, 2009

    If you’re wondering about the title it was supposed to be Cellar Door ll, but apparently Trion doesnt allow two capital Is to follow each other :\

  • LoveDoctor on Oct 20, 2009

    Excellent story part 1 and 2. Well-written, vivid imagination and good imagery. I enjoyed both parts. “Those eyes staring back at him.”

  • Atanacio on Oct 20, 2009

    I like this side of your writing style :)

  • Hollywood James on Oct 21, 2009

    Excellent!!! Keep going with it…this is really some great material. You definitely have great talent and creativity. Fantastic imagination!!!!

  • mathurans on Oct 21, 2009

    Nice Part 2

  • johnnydod on Oct 21, 2009

    Well part two was well worth waiting for, I am writing a book at the moment and I know just how much time it takes,
    well done Aleena I enjoyed this so much and now I know just what it takes to write the likes of this.
    Keep up the good work and more power to your pen.

  • giftarist on Oct 21, 2009

    That was great.. Really like this!

  • cutedrishti8 on Oct 21, 2009

    Vert well written Aleena..

  • ken bultman on Oct 21, 2009

    Excellent short story. Had all the components…begining, middle and end. Well plotted and written.

  • Sourav on Oct 21, 2009

    Nice write… you’ve a good skill of writing stories.

  • cardy on Oct 21, 2009

    Fab fab story keep it up, a really good write from you.

  • chantell on Oct 21, 2009

    Great story

  • Avaxier on Oct 21, 2009

    Great story, you’re really good at this. Both parts are so scary and exciting, I love it!

  • Aleena on Oct 21, 2009

    Thanks guys! Really means a lot to me to see all your comments :)

  • Papa Sparks on Oct 26, 2009

    Really like your attention to detail in this one as well as the way it reads.

  • DGFRANK123 on Nov 7, 2009

    Wow! nice

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