My latest challenge is to re-write Cinderella.

Cinderella, the story you thought you knew.
Well this is the real story of Cinderella.

We all know the traditional fairy tale of Cinderella.

Well you are about to find out the true Cinderella tale.

Cinderella, as you know, lived in her fathers castle with her step-mother and her 2 horrible step-sisters, Anastasia and Drizella. Her father died not long ago but since then her life has been miserable.

Every day her step-mother orders her about, forcing her to do endless jobs throughout the castle. She also had to cook meals for all of them and clean up after her step-sisters.

Cinderella is not a happy girl. The life she once knew, so full of hope and happiness had turned into a life full of despair and sadness.

One day Cinderella heard there was going to be a ball at the Kings castle so that the Prince could find a bride.

Cinderella just had to be there but she knew her step-mother would not let her.

So Cinderella worked extra hard at every job she had to do. She even smiled and sang happy songs as she made her step-sister’s dresses for the ball.

When no one was watching Cinderella took the scraps from Anastasia and Drizella’s dresses to make one for herself. She sewed the scraps of material together and in the end the dress was beautiful. Much prettier than the ones she made for Anastasia and Drizella.

Cinderella had unusual friends. Gus, the mouse was her best friend and she also made good friends with other mice, birds and every animal she met.

As she had to work so hard, Cinderella didn’t have time to make friends or go anywhere so they were the only friends she had.

Here friends all loved to hear Cinderella sing. The birds chirped along as she got ready for the ball.

Cinderella looked lovely. It wasn’t perfect but not bad for what she could do.

Innocently Cinderella skipped down the long set of stairs to meet her step-sisters and her step-mother at the front door.

“I’m ready!” Cinderella proclaimed excitedly.

All three of them turned around with nasty scowls on their faces.

“Ready for what?” asked the step-mother.

“I’m ready to go to the ball.” Cinderella replied.

All three started laughing hysterically.

“Oh you’re so funny!” cried Anastasia.

“You’re not going to the ball!” snapped the step-mother.

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  • The Quail 1957 on Dec 18, 2010

    Awesome article I really enjoyed the story.

  • Larry Fish on Dec 18, 2010

    Quite a twist on the story. Great job Nina, well done. I really enjoyed reading your version.

  • Mary Patricia Bird on Dec 19, 2010

    Interesting twist. :)

  • Love Nancy on Dec 19, 2010

    Nicely Written…..!!! Keep it up.!!

  • UncleSammy on Dec 19, 2010

    NICE SHARE

  • fagina on Dec 19, 2010

    Wow..this is sooo nice….This is A fairy tale re written to cater to the senses of adults. Really good:)

  • awesome11 on Dec 19, 2010

    band baaja baraat

  • clandestinef on Dec 19, 2010

    Thanks for sharing this one. I love it.

  • Christine Ramsay on Dec 19, 2010

    Aah! What a sad ending for poor Cinderella. This is quite a twist on the original story. Very well written.

    Christine

  • AlexiaJ on Dec 19, 2010

    Very interesting,but I’d wish it had a happy ending :)

  • Nina Mason on Dec 19, 2010

    Thank you Quail & Larry. I’m so glad.
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    Thanks Pat.
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    Thanks Nancy & Sam.
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    Thank you very much fagina. I wanted to make it more realistic.
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    Awesome… I had to search that. The movie doesn’t really sound like my story but looks interesting.
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    I’m glad thank you clandestine.
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    Thanks Christine & Alexia. I wanted it to be a little more true to life.
    After all there is no fairy tale ending.

  • Yovita Siswati on Dec 20, 2010

    Interesting twist :-) Great post.

  • Heather Dawn on Dec 21, 2010

    Loved it. That was funny, and I must say, kept me spellbound. Good writing.

  • Nina Mason on Dec 23, 2010

    Thank you Yovita I’m glad you like it.

  • Nina Mason on Dec 23, 2010

    Thank you Heather. I was worried it might be too long and I would lose some readers. I am so glad you liked it.

  • Nina Mason on Jan 6, 2011

    Giving this a bump up. :)

  • Mr Nina on Feb 3, 2011

    Well done, keeped my on the edge of my seat, but as a hopless romantic I wanted a happy ending :(

  • Nina Mason on Feb 3, 2011

    Aww sorry Mr Nina .. you finally start reading my articles and give me my first sad face lol
    Sorry you didn’t get your happy ending… or did you?

  • Erin Miller on Feb 7, 2011

    An interesting view on the story. I liked it.

  • Nina Mason on Feb 8, 2011

    Thank you Erin.

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