Doris had suffered a miscarriage and couldn’t seen to understand exactly what had happened. Had someone taken the baby away? There was something strange and unnerving about the little secret smile playing on her face. Her husband, Martin tried to comfort Doris and explain that when she felt better they would start their family, and she would have her baby. But what strange thoughts are in Doris’s mind?

Doris’s Baby

Sunlight filtered through the lace curtains and splattered across the room in lacy dribbles. Doris sat in her rocking chair with quilt pieces spread out in her lap.  A quiet smile played across her face as she knotted the thread and clipped it with her scissors. This was her first quilt and she was pleased with the way the colors she had chosen presented the pattern. Effie, her mother-in-law had watched Doris cut out the pieces with a puzzled look on her face. ” Honey, are you sure that’s the colors you want to put in your quilt” she had asked. “They’re of my choosing.” Doris had answered. She had measured, cut, and ironed each quilt piece before running it up on the thread. Now she sat sewing the pieces together to make the blocks that would be her first quilt.

Martin slammed the back door as he came in from the back yard.”Are you feeling better,sugar?” he called from the kitchen. Doris could hear the tinkle of ice as he plumped the ice into a glass for tea. The squeak of the rocker answered as Martin came into the living room. Doris looked up at him with a smile. “Did you see the baby before they took her away?” she asked,   Martin answered, “No sweetheart, you know it wasn’t really a baby yet.” It had hardly begun to be a baby. Doctor Betmen talked to both of us.  Don’t you remember? You have to snap out of this funk you are in. It’s going to be all right. We can start another baby as soon as you are feeling well.  You’ll see, by this time next year you will be sitting right here in your rocker rocking our own baby. Your quilt will be finished and ready to wrap her up in. Now come give me a kiss and get that weird smile off your face. You’re freaking me out.

Doris wandered around the house fluffing a pillow here and smoothing a wrinkle there but in the kitchen the dishes from last night’s supper set on the table and in the sink. Martin had found bread to make toast for breakfast and perked a pot of coffee while Doris set with her quilt pieces and a smile on her face. Now she was searching for something but if you had asked her what she was searching for, she wouldn’t have had an answer. But she knew it was important and she would know when she found it. Martin had gone to work, and had stopped by Effie’s to ask her to come over and check on Doris. He didn’t like leaving Doris alone in the state she was in. He thought about calling Dr. Betmen but didn’t know if he should and had done nothing.

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  • Anuradha Ramkumar on Jun 2, 2010

    Very touching one. I would have been like Doris if I had not got my baby from the incubator. She was a pre-term baby and it was a mental pressure for me till she was discharged and given to me.

  • chayanika on Jun 2, 2010

    very nicely written. A good touching story.

  • ronthoughts on Jun 3, 2010

    I agree with the above views, touching story.
    Well composed.
    Liked!

  • Christine Ramsay on Jun 3, 2010

    Gosh! What an ending! I suppose miscarriage can affect you that deeply. A very well written story.

    Christine

  • Domenico Cigliano on Jun 3, 2010

    Great story but did not suspect such a disturbing ending.

  • rajaryanme on Jun 3, 2010

    Very nice story.

  • flowerrose on Jun 3, 2010

    What a great story.

  • Atanacio on Jun 3, 2010

    wow very touching very involving…

  • Katien on Jun 3, 2010

    Gave me goosebumps – chilling! v. good.

  • CRYSTAL EVANS on Jun 3, 2010

    this was a very good story ruby. Doris is not alone in the world as many women have been in this situation. life is filled with so many unforseen trials and pains. thanks for sharing

  • VTech on Jun 3, 2010

    good post

  • Tulan on Jun 3, 2010

    Wow, what a shocker. That was a psycho thriller. I didn’t expect the ending. It’s a great reading experience. It surely wasn’t boring. I hope you will write more of these for us.

  • amanda casey on Jun 4, 2010

    Excellent!

  • Jimmy Shilaho on Jun 4, 2010

    You are such a great story teller. Loved it, really.

  • sasuke191 on Jun 5, 2010

    This is a very touching story and I must say very beautifully written!.. Keep up the good work.. :)

  • Shirley Shuler on Jun 5, 2010

    A very touching story, Ruby.

  • Daisy Peasblossom on Jun 5, 2010

    BRRRR!!! That’s a real chiller, Ruby. Wow.

  • priyaa on Jun 6, 2010

    This story is well composed which is heart touching Ruby

  • PR Mace on Jun 6, 2010

    That gave me the chills. Wonderfully written.

  • sara20 on Jun 8, 2010

    Excellent manner and very well-written sentence is doing, with useful information includes a good things you have in your article.

    Thanks and cheers.
    Sara

  • Val Mills on Jan 26, 2011

    You held me throughout, the ending was perfect. More stories please :-)

  • V rank on Jan 26, 2011

    i hate the ending, i hate it in a good way… so good… great storyline.

  • UncleSammy on Jan 26, 2011

    Nice share

  • tonywriter on Jan 26, 2011

    touching and very well written Thank you for this sharing :)

  • webseowriters on Jan 26, 2011

    Thanks for such an excellent share

  • Christine Ramsay on Jan 26, 2011

    How did this one get here? I have reread it and it is a fascinating story.

    Christine

  • Jenny Heart on Jan 26, 2011

    Didn’t expect that ending. I thought she was going to tell him they were going to be able to adopt a baby very soon. I’m all for happing ending, but it doesn’t always happen.

  • yes me on Jan 26, 2011

    This is a great write Ruby, the thing is so many young woman suffer mental break downs, after such a terrible thing, but your ending was like a classic horror tale cheers

  • SharifaMcFarlane on Jan 26, 2011

    Quite a few women have to endure that kind of pain. Good story Ruby.

  • leoforex on Jan 26, 2011

    nice post

  • LewSethics on Jan 26, 2011

    Thats sick.

  • Betty Carew on Jan 26, 2011

    Wow Ruby you never fail to surprise me . What an awesome story. I wasn\’t expecting the ending. Excellent read Ruby.

  • The Soul Explorer on Jan 26, 2011

    This is great, Ruby!

  • Netty net on Jan 26, 2011

    This could make a good televison show

  • lillyrose on Jan 26, 2011

    WOW… you are such a great story teller. I am still suffering from the after shock of this one. What an ending!
    I can relate to how this happened, not that I ever had a miscarriage or lost any of my babies but I did suffer mental disturbances after each one was born and I can see how something like this would be so possible. Fantastic Ruby, I loved it.

  • Darla Cooke on Jan 26, 2011

    Great story and a very surprising ending!

  • pocketsofchange on Jan 26, 2011

    Wonderful story. Reminds me a bit of the story in the headlines right now of that baby girl stolen 23 years ago by a woman who had just miscarried. The young lady was just reunited with her mother and the woman who raised her has been arrested. Grief makes people do crazy things!

    Anyway, your story has such description and is so well written…really enjoyed it!

  • jemialbert on Jan 26, 2011

    nice one

  • Mystical Whitewolf on Jan 26, 2011

    You are a talented writer, you not only built up the suspense you ended it with an unexpected twist. Well done.

  • Mystical Whitewolf on Jan 26, 2011

    You are a very talented writer, You built up the suspense; However the ending was twisted. I did not see that coming…. Look out Steven King here comes Ruby Hawk

  • Kate Smedley on Jan 26, 2011

    Well written and absorbing story Ruby – like everyone else I didn’t see that ending coming at all.

  • Noisy Cricket on Jan 26, 2011

    Wow.

  • papaleng on Jan 27, 2011

    sad and touching story, indeed

  • LCM Linda on Jan 27, 2011

    A sad, touching story with a very unexpected ending. Well-done.

  • albert1jemi on Jan 27, 2011

    nice one

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