A fry-cook fantasizes about escaping to Europe with his girlfriend, while she desperately tries to convey a message to him.

You walk hand-in-hand along the Champs-Elysées, the Eiffel Tower rising from the trees, a glittering spire watching over the two of you. Taking side streets at random, making your way through the city, through small neighborhoods where a ten-speed bicycle is still the primary mode of transportation, you find your way to the river, then across to the Notre Dame cathedral. On the steps of the church you stop and kiss, bathed in the warm orange glow of the setting sun.

Tired from walking all day, you rest on the large granite steps. You pull Rachel to you and rest your face on the top of her head. Though damp from the sweat, you can still smell the shampoo she used this morning. She turns her head to look into your eyes. Her mouth opens but all that comes out is high-pitched shrills letting you know the fries are done.

You pull the silver baskets out of the bubbling grease and latch them on the back of the fryer to drip. The meat on the grill sizzles and pops as you slide the long metal spatula under it and transfer it to a plastic tray.

A manager shouts from the front that they need more cheeseburgers and hamburgers. Some little kid is having a birthday party today. The fifteen-year-old hostess is telling you about how some kid’s father tried to hit on her last week.

You are half listening as you try to pull the meat off the grill without getting burned. The new guy making sandwiches behind you tells you he needs more grilled chicken. The manager calls to the girl that the party is here, and she bounds up front to show the party to the back room. Watching her walk away you think about how much she looks like Rachel when she was in high school.

The note you found this morning taped to your toaster was from Rachel. You didn’t read it.

It is tucked away, still neatly folded in your jacket pocket, hanging in the back room. Today was not the first time you woke up alone in the morning. It had in fact been happening more frequently lately, but it was the first morning you woke up to a note. It couldn’t be anything important, you think, or else she would have waken you to tell you.

She wasn’t around a much as she used to be. Most of the time she would be in the apartment when you got home from work, standing in the kitchen area, getting dinner ready. She’d look up at you and watch you walk into the bathroom to take a shower. It was a rule that you couldn’t get within five feet of her until you were clean. Dinner would be ready when you got out.

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  • shirtlessbob on Jul 12, 2008

    Rachel: perfect delusion. Reading this reminded me that we all have our own Rachel. Great work!

  • JP on Jul 12, 2008

    Loved it!! Artful writing. Please keep them coming.

  • #1 fan on Jul 12, 2008

    That’s a poignant and beautiful written story. I am angry at him for not facing reality, yet don’t we all do something similar during difficult periods in our lives now and again? Yet Rachel is not facing reality directly either – she’s hiding behind notes to tell him the truth. I love the transitions, keep you on your toes, unexpected.

  • bostonewe (sarah) on Jul 12, 2008

    Matt,
    Another awesome story. This one actually made me tear up a little. The transitions between reality and fantasy are very smooth and the story draws you in, because everyone has not only a Rachel in their lives (or Raphael, I suppose), but also a bit of the narrator in them (how often have any of us taken the easy road or the passive step?). Your narrative style is very relatable. I truly enjoyed reading it.
    Excellent!
    ~sarah

  • Jenna on Jul 12, 2008

    great work. I loved it

    - Jenna

  • Lily on Jul 13, 2008

    Wow this story was great. I love how he prefers to escape to a fantasy world rather than face reality. Keep them coming!

  • Erinn on Jul 13, 2008

    You rock! I can’t wait to see what else you have!!!

  • Betty B on Jul 14, 2008

    Good job, Matt !!! Keep em\’ coming !!!!!!

  • tonisan60 on Jul 15, 2008

    Nice images of beautiful places in a poem marvelous, my claps for your work.

  • Dan aka Mowers10 on Jul 15, 2008

    Much better than the last one

  • T on Jul 21, 2008

    niiiiice. i like it.

  • Lisa on Jul 31, 2008

    WOW, I want to read more of your writing. Not because we are related, because you are really GOOD!

    Love Lisa
    P.S. Peggy knows who I am!!!!
    Keep um comin, I send them to all my friends too.

  • Ankur on Aug 23, 2008

    The beginning of the story ended up giving me a good smile and then you could start to tell where the story was going, but still want to hold on to that piece of hope by not unfolding the note. Well executed transitions from reality to day dreams and it all flowed into each other seamlessly.

  • Chris I on Oct 1, 2008

    Great story. I like the use of second-person point-of-view.

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