A horror/fantasy short story I wrote once for a school project. I’m still rather pleased with it.

I hammered on the door, feeling the rain run down my sleeves, bruising my knuckles against the ancient wood. At last, oh, at last the door opened. I felt warmth flow out over me, tasted that hot, dry taste, like burning dust that cakes the shelves in an old library.

“Oh God, thank you, thank you,” I gasped, “there’s been an accident. The car…it crashed…I …I can’t see.” I took a deep breath. “They were taking me to the hospital, you see, to …my eyes…I had a…problem…a year ago…a fire. It blinded me. I’m better, you understand, almost better. We crashed…I – I think they’re dead… I can’t see…”

The sound I remember from childhood: fingers-on-lips, a gentle sigh, and a calm, masculine voice. “Calm yourself. Come inside.” The voice was soft, but accentuated by the heavy, precise tone of Eastern Europe. There was a smile in his tone. Ironic. It made me think, that voice, think of a tall, melancholy man, in his mid thirties. A man who had travelled, who had seen things. He led me inside, my feet testing each step.

“Let me shut the door,” he said. I heard the door creak shut, felt the chill wind cease. “My name is Conrad. You are…?”

I told him that my name was Clara, not daring to utter my full name. I heard him repeat it a few times, but his voice faded, and was left to the wind. My hands groped for contact. I called to him, reminded him that I could not see.

“I’m here,” he whispered, and he took my hands in his. I felt his fingers play across my palms and I shivered. “Clara, there is blood on your hands.”

“Blood?” I lifted my hands level with my eyes, a futile effort. “Oh. I wanted to see if the driver was still alive. I checked his pulse. That was it.” I smiled.

“Come with me.” Forward; my hands in his. Stairs. It’s hard to go up and down stairs when you can’t look at your feet. Try it. He took me through a doorway, a spare bedroom I suppose it must have been, showed me to a bathroom, gave me a towel and some fresh clothes. I waited until he had gone, hearing the door click shut and no longer hearing his breath. I felt my way into the bathroom. The clothes were a man’s clothes: a cotton shirt, pressed trousers, a woollen jumper, and a pair of slippers which smelled old, but I was warm and dry. I felt safe.

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  • Emma C.S on Jan 25, 2007

    Whoops. I published this under the wrong title. This isn’t Grave Fortunes, this was untitled. Sorry.

  • Emma C.S on May 16, 2007

    Ignore the above comment. We’ve got the edit-y thing now, so it’s sorted.

  • Lucy Lockett on May 22, 2007

    It makes it much easier.

  • Meri Jeffrey on May 24, 2007

    This was riveting! You kept the momentum up very well. Thanks for sharing a prize which you should be very proud of, despite the subject matter.

  • adam on Nov 9, 2007

    it was interesting, not your normal supernatural tale…I really enjoyed it!

    -adam

  • Jestor on Nov 1, 2008

    @Meri DESPITE the subject matter? The subject matter was perfect!

    …He turns and speaks to the author, “And I thought the story itself was masterful, a real work of genius. So many different elements in there, it might make me think it could be expanded into a longer story, but the very fact of the vagueness makes this one work as short as it is. Well done!”

  • Joni Keith on Feb 15, 2009

    Nice twist. You threw me a red herring on that one, you did. This is an excellent story, Emma. You had me all the way till the end.

  • Majic on Feb 17, 2009

    I can’t believe it was just 2 freaking pages! I want to read on! But perhaps the art is also on the shortness.
    I hope this comment gets through at the first try!

  • miss cornelia on Feb 24, 2009

    Bone chilling; You really do know how to spin a story Emma. :)

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