When your kid brother tells you about the monster under the bed or in the closet, don’t be so quick to dismiss it.

                                      

 

 

Little Eddy’s Dark Friend

                                                                                    By David Crerand

           

 

 

My dad’s name was Ed, but thankfully I had been named Thomas, after my grandfather, and that left my kid brother to be named after our father. So he would be the one cursed with being called Little Eddy all his life. I had often heard Mom and Dad joke about Eddy being their little accident. It’s not that they didn’t love him or anything like that; it’s just that he had come as quite a surprise. My sister was already fourteen and I was eleven when Eddy was born. My parents figured “been there, done that”, but then, hey, surprise!

Little Eddy was only six years old when the really weird stuff started to happen.

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At first, it was just things disappearing. Now, I’m not talking about not being able to find

a couple of items that might have been misplaced or accidentally put in the wrong drawer or something like that. Once something disappeared, it was never seen again! Not ever! Our suspicions were focused on Little Eddy right from the start, simply because none of his things ever disappeared. It was always my stuff, or Mom and Dad’s stuff, and once in a while, before she moved out to an apartment of her own, my sister Eileen’s stuff. My parents tried to discipline him repeatedly to make him stop, but Little Eddy just kept professing his innocence, and things kept disappearing. They tried everything. They talked with him about not touching other people’s things. They sent him to his room without supper and refused to pay him his allowance. They took away favorite toys and finally as a last resort they even spanked him, which was something my parents had never done to me or my sister, and you could see that it hurt them very much to be driven to that point with Eddy. They were at their wits end when they decided to talk with a professional.

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  • alc on Aug 27, 2009

    This was an enjoyable read!! Keep up the great work!

  • Tanya Wallace on Aug 27, 2009

    The whole storyline was brilliant creating a whole lot of feelings, going from sad at the beginning, feeling sorry for little Eddy, to tense, wondering what was going to happen next then to happy at the ending! Excellent work,I loved it, very compelling read! !

  • Veronica on Aug 28, 2009

    Great Story!!

  • Shawn O on Aug 30, 2009

    Great story. I really enjoyed reading it. I’m a fan.

  • shaneprairie on Aug 31, 2009

    Wow, It really captured my attention and after I was done I wanted more!

  • Ruby Hawk on Sep 2, 2009

    What a creative story. It\\\’s wonderful. You should have it published. I loved it.

  • Anne Lyken Garner on Sep 3, 2009

    You write very well – a lot better than a large number of Triond users. I think that you have the talent naturally and should take up some sort of writing course to prove yourself to publishers (I know, it’s a sad thing that us writers have to prove ourselves).

    There is one thing I’d say and it’s that your speech tags sometimes have too many adverbs and adjectives. (He said evenly, I said quietly, He said loudly). I think that situations like that could be read in just the way the story is written (show not tell).

    Like I said, you have a natural talent for writing.

  • Rick Summers on Sep 3, 2009

    Great Read!

  • Jane Jane on Sep 5, 2009

    interesting story.. =)

  • Sourav on Sep 6, 2009

    Nice! Nice indeed! Publish it in print media!

  • lillyrose on Sep 8, 2009

    That was a very interesting read, I really enjoyed that and was sad when it was over. You write very, very well and I really think you should consider extending it and making it to a book. You could have the other people in the ‘collection’ telling a little of their story! fantastic, I shall be visiting again x

  • Chris Marlowe II on Sep 9, 2009

    Dear Mr Crerand,

    I’m happy to inform you that the Monster Under The Bed, aka the Dark Friend of Little Ed, aka the Bogeyman, is:

    Yours Truly,
    the One & Only
    Troll of Triond

  • mdizar on Oct 11, 2009

    This is nice! Thanks for sharing with us! Keep on writing =)

  • eminemgrl123 on Oct 16, 2009

    Best I’ve read on this site for a while. :)

  • XXElleXX on Dec 21, 2009

    ;-) Guess some people don’t realise that you’re already a magnificently talented writer:-) A well-written and well-crafted tale about a teenage boy and his kid brother..and a strange being who collects things and has taken up residence behind his little brother’s bookcase..scary and gothic-like..you write with a great sense of imagery David..I loved this story :-)

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