Comments on: Little Eddy’s Dark Friend

By: Elleword

Elleword — Mon, 21 Dec 2009 11:07:00 +0000

Guess some people don’t realise that you’re already a magnificently talented writer:-) A well-written and well-crafted tale about a teenage boy and his kid brother..and a strange being who collects things and has taken up residence behind his little brother’s bookcase..scary and gothic-like..you write with a great sense of imagery David..I loved this story

By: eminemgrl123

eminemgrl123 — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 02:17:20 +0000

Best I’ve read on this site for a while.

By: mdizar

mdizar — Sun, 11 Oct 2009 11:52:05 +0000

This is nice! Thanks for sharing with us! Keep on writing =)

By: Chris Marlowe II

Chris Marlowe II — Wed, 09 Sep 2009 09:45:11 +0000

Dear Mr Crerand,

I’m happy to inform you that the Monster Under The Bed, aka the Dark Friend of Little Ed, aka the Bogeyman, is:

Yours Truly,
the One & Only
Troll of Triond

By: lillyrose

lillyrose — Tue, 08 Sep 2009 18:11:55 +0000

That was a very interesting read, I really enjoyed that and was sad when it was over. You write very, very well and I really think you should consider extending it and making it to a book. You could have the other people in the ‘collection’ telling a little of their story! fantastic, I shall be visiting again x

By: Sourav

Sourav — Sun, 06 Sep 2009 18:56:18 +0000

Nice! Nice indeed! Publish it in print media!

By: Jane Jane

Jane Jane — Sat, 05 Sep 2009 14:52:25 +0000

interesting story.. =)

By: Rick Summers

Rick Summers — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 13:12:57 +0000

Great Read!

By: Anne Lyken Garner

Anne Lyken Garner — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 08:14:26 +0000

You write very well – a lot better than a large number of Triond users. I think that you have the talent naturally and should take up some sort of writing course to prove yourself to publishers (I know, it’s a sad thing that us writers have to prove ourselves).

There is one thing I’d say and it’s that your speech tags sometimes have too many adverbs and adjectives. (He said evenly, I said quietly, He said loudly). I think that situations like that could be read in just the way the story is written (show not tell).

Like I said, you have a natural talent for writing.

By: Ruby Hawk

Ruby Hawk — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 01:39:01 +0000

What a creative story. It\\\’s wonderful. You should have it published. I loved it.