The darkness was suffocating. Little Marie was just six years old and was sitting amid the boxes and cleaning appliances, which were stored in this cupboard under the stairs where she now found herself, not for the first time.

Her little chest was heaving as she sobbed quietly. It would not do to be heard. She could hear a scratching sound over her shoulder but though she peered tearfully around she could see nothing. Terror threatened to burst out of her as she felt the urge to bang on the door begging to let out of her prison. But she knew the effort would be futile as any sound from her meant extra time in the dark.

 

It was all so unjust. She had just been protecting her beloved doll. Rosie was a black doll and she loved her so, but her brother had picked her up and wrenched her head off. Marie had taken one look at the doll and screamed. She had been seized with such fear at the sight of the headless doll that she had continued to scream and cry hysterically and had hit her brother repeatedly, totally unable to stop herself. Her mother, on hearing the hullabaloo, had come into the room and smacked her so hard that Marie cried even louder. Having heard enough her mother had dragged to the under stair cupboard and had thrown her in.

 

The time passed so slowly. Marie could hear her brothers playing beyond the door. Though she loved them dearly they did enjoy tormenting her and she always got the blame. They were too small and cute to cause trouble, or so their mother thought. The minutes continued to tick slowly by. Marie had managed to calm herself a little and tried hard to think of happier things. A little time later the door opened. Marie blinked in the sudden light. Her mother beckoned to her to come out and have her tea. Slowly she emerged looking around through tear filled eyes for Rosie, but she was nowhere to be seen. She didn’t dare to ask for her but took her place at the table and tried to eat.

 

Once the children had finished they were put to bed and the light was switched off. Marie covered her face with her blanket as further tears fell unchecked. The little mound where she slept shook silently as she tried to control herself. She knew there would be little sleep without her beloved Rosie alongside her. Just as she was beginning to drift off the bedroom door swung open and the light from the landing showed the figure of her dad, and in his arms, complete once again, was Rosie. He handed her to Marie. The smile on Marie’s face was such a beautiful sight that her dad took her in his arms and gave here the biggest of hugs. She whispered “Thank you”, as her father left the room and happy once again she fell into a deep sleep.

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  • martie on Sep 23, 2009

    good story, but even the return of the doll does not make up for the poor child being locked in the closet.

  • Yovita Siswati on Sep 23, 2009

    poor child… hearing child\\\’s scream might be frustating, but I don’t think the mother shoud locked her in the closet. Thanks for sharing the story.

  • ceegirl on Sep 23, 2009

    poor baby

  • CHAN LEE PENG on Sep 23, 2009

    Being locked in the closet, was however a nightmare for her, because this sad event had certainly filled her little heart with fear and despair. Good story anyway, have me clicked you “liked it”

  • Unofre Pili on Sep 23, 2009

    Nice storyline maam, but not quiet good of an inspiration to children in my opinion.

  • Lady Sunshine on Sep 23, 2009

    It is a work of fiction (I hope). Nice write, Christine.

  • ken bultman on Sep 23, 2009

    Dad’s are great, too, huh? Any personal bio here?

  • Goodselfme on Sep 23, 2009

    Good story teller. TX for showing your talent in this way.

  • fishfry aka Elizabeth Figueroa on Sep 23, 2009

    Awesome article, well presented

  • Jamie Myles on Sep 23, 2009

    Such a sad tale, very well told.Two thumbs up and an I liked it !

  • Shamanz on Sep 23, 2009

    Couldn’t agree more with the comments above, a sad tale and very well written, bursting with emotion and great scenery.

    thumbs up!

  • Sourav on Sep 23, 2009

    Very well presented write. That’s why it’s good to read. Well Done! :)

  • R.B. Parsley on Sep 23, 2009

    Christine,
    I loved your story. I felt so sorry for little Marie. You almost had me crying too! But I think her brother should have been punished too. Excellent story!!!!

    Randy

  • Ruby Hawk on Sep 23, 2009

    Dads often saves the day when mom has had more than enough of the kids shinanagins. poor baby.

  • PR Mace on Sep 23, 2009

    I didn’t like the part about being locked away but thank goodness dad saved the day. It was a sad and touching tale.

  • CA Johnson on Sep 23, 2009

    Very good story! I felt so bad for the girl. That is so horrible to be locked away like that.

  • Judy Sheldon on Sep 23, 2009

    I know two different individuals who suffer from anxieties due to being locked in closets as children. Parenting is not always easy, but parents need to pray for guidance and be big enough to apologize to their children when they err.

    Your story was emotion packed and I hope not true.

  • Poetic Enigma on Sep 24, 2009

    Great story, very well written! Sad for the girl to go through that, but I liked how it ended!

  • petercurtis97 on Sep 24, 2009

    A lovely story and picture illustrations too.

  • Christine Ramsay on Sep 24, 2009

    Thank you for your comments. You know what they say, write about what you know. There are some very early memories here.

    Christine

  • Jane Jane on Sep 24, 2009

    sad for the little girl.

  • Nikita K on Sep 24, 2009

    This is such a sad emotion laden and you have the talent to make a reader cry Christine, which a really laudable talent when it comes to creative writing. A really depressing account but beautifully written.

  • deep blue on Sep 24, 2009

    A nice read, let me recall my own childhood nightmares. Great work Christine.

  • Tina Cassello on Sep 25, 2009

    I’m glad the story ended happily, but I agree with the above comments about how cruel this was of the parent and the harmful affect it probably had on the child even though supressed as time when by.

  • lillyrose on Sep 26, 2009

    You led us on tiptoe beautifully through the story. x

  • mark ramsay on Sep 26, 2009

    That’s quite a story. I remember you tell me about a black doll years ago. Could it be this one?

  • S A JOHNSON on Oct 4, 2009

    Very powerfully written

  • monica55 on Oct 10, 2009

    Oh! poor baby! But a very well presented piece.
    Monica.

  • Jacques Berkeley on Dec 6, 2011

    Excellent!

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