A short short inspired by a Lostash Picable.

I suppose I was in love with her, I don’t know.  You know how young folks are.  We jerked one another around…had  fun and weren’t seeing other people but on the other hand we were not engaged or even going steady.  We did the movies and the burgers and fries bit and yes, we were, how do I put this, intimate, a couple of times.  She was just the sort of girl I presumed I was going to marry some day.  It never occurred to  me that it would’t happen.

photo by lostash

I knew her well enough to know her favorite flower was the white daisy…the one with the big yellow doodad in the middle.  It was the right time of the year and our pasture was just filled with them.  I picked  a big bouquet a fixed them up pretty with a twistum from a bread wrapper  and headed for her house although the hour was a bit late.   No matter.  Uncle Sam had called me and I had to go tomorrow no matter what.

When I arrived at her house there was a bit of a surprise..  Whoa.  Dogies!  There was a strange car in her driveway–a convertible–with the top down no less.  The lights were mostly off–just the bathroom light was on so no one would trip over the cat.  I thought to myself, hmmm, she’s not ready for my company.

I don’t know what I did with the daisies.  I think I put them in the front seat of the convertible…not to make a statement…I wasn’t mad at her and I wasn’t jealous of him…I just didn’t want to make a mess for the street department.  Yeah, right.  The next morning I boarded a train and rode off to war.  It was the only time I saw my father cry.

I never wrote to her so she never had my address to write back and we lost contact.   That was many years ago and now my internet service is proud to advise they are giving me a $15 discount on my order.  She died yesterday and I ordered a bouquet of white daisies to be delivered…specifically with big yellow doodads in the middle.

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  • Mr Ghaz on Oct 4, 2009

    A great story and very interesting read. well-presented too..Thanks for sharing this magnificent work :)

  • ceegirl on Oct 4, 2009

    Great story.

  • Lostash on Oct 4, 2009

    Great piece, Ken. You always manage to provoke an emotional response on some level!

  • Melody SJAL on Oct 4, 2009

    Oh, what happened? That\’s very interesting.

  • Brenda Nelson on Oct 4, 2009

    Your stories are so well told, unfolding perfectly, I can never be sure if they are truth or not.
    A beer and a bump? Either you paid for sex or I have no idea what a bump is.

  • Ramalingam on Oct 4, 2009

    A very nice story with a nice ending too.

  • lillyrose on Oct 4, 2009

    That was a sad story, filled with loads of emotion. Was it a true story? The flower pictures were so fitting (well done losty) and the imagery was all there.

    I love daisies but I love the white Lilly best. x

  • deep blue on Oct 4, 2009

    Nice story Ken. I presumed your past has a lot to do with the newsroom not a word of the battlefield. Whatever, your narration just unfolds so cool and left me thinking till the end.

  • Marie Antoinette on Oct 4, 2009

    It made me cry, loved it!

  • Christine Ramsay on Oct 4, 2009

    A very poignant write, Ken. I really liked it.

    Christine

  • Darla Cooke on Oct 4, 2009

    Interesting story.

  • Lady Sunshine on Oct 4, 2009

    Sighs…you really know how to pull at the heart strings. Great as usual.

  • Sourav on Oct 4, 2009

    Interesting article!

  • Mythili Kannan on Oct 4, 2009

    Very nice shot and story

  • Ruby Hawk on Oct 4, 2009

    I love your story, Ken. It’s beautiful.

  • Ask Cash on Oct 5, 2009

    Beautiful story. You made lovely use of lostash’s photos.
    I’m not going to ask if its a true story… :)

  • wonder on Oct 5, 2009

    A consuming story with the floral touch.

  • Jane Jane on Oct 5, 2009

    nice story. you wrote your story well with great pictures.

  • strovek on Oct 5, 2009

    Nice story and also suitable pictures.

  • LOVELYHONEY on Oct 5, 2009

    i love natural beauty as u depict really good

  • Sheila M on Oct 6, 2009

    That one gave me goosebumps…so beautiful and beautifully written. I do love how you do that….leave the ending to our own interpretation….very nice:)

  • riccardof on Oct 9, 2009

    A very touching and moving story. Thanks

  • Nadine Simone on Oct 10, 2009

    They say that the pen is mightier than the sword. You young man, must have have the sharpest blade out!

    Nadine

  • Jane Benitez on Oct 12, 2009

    That was so beautiful and I hope it was true.

  • PR Mace on Oct 28, 2009

    A beautifully sad story. You are a great story teller.

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