Very Very Good Flowerchild very discriptive and all the way through you made me wonder what would happen next and when it did, it did with impact.

Best Wishes foryour next

Tim

It took me a minute to get used to your style of writing but about Incident number two I understood it and it got very fast paced, I like how your text style for different parts in the story changed(at least it seemed like it did to me).
very nice read!!!

Interesting story. I really liked the ending. It was very unexpected. You may want to look into spell checking your work though. And there are several punctuation issues throughout. But the story was a fun read.

great read, i have been looking for more short stories to be posted

Another great short story.

-Fresh Writing

another great read from pen in hand!
keep it up!

very nice…

I love your descriptions! Someone told me- to write successfully, one must be honest with themselves. I can see you are completely honest and open with yourself.

an very good write in a new exciting style. Could be excellent when you become more comfortable in your own skin. Dave