Disorientated and lost, my quest to find my friend brings me to an unusual place.

There was a light knock on the heavy, cold, steel door. Flakes of dirty red paint drift lazily to the floor. At first the knock was easy to ignore. With time, of which there was precious little, the knock became more persistent. Louder. Heavier. Intrusive.

Needed a nap so desperately: hadn’t slept in days. Eyelids were heavy. Knock. Was I dreaming? Knock. How did anyone know where I was? What was this place? Knock.

It seemed like days since I escaped the hum of the city. My sunglasses lay unblinkingly on the floor beside me. My precious little white sleeping pills spilled on the dark, worn, wooden floor looked like the remnants of a crystal snowflake shattered by someone’s dream. Was that knocking or just a pounding headache? So hard to tell. Sunlight slipping in through a defect in the blinds: such a strange, strange room. Knock.

Had to find what I had lost, no time to loose. How stupid I had become. Get up you fool and resume your search. Knock. Swung my heavy leaden legs over the edge of the crude bed. Listened to the crunch of my exotic sunglasses become more of the trash in my seemingly long, empty life. Knock.

Stood up fast, too fast. Grabbed a long piece of wood to assist me to the door. It had a curved black, sharp metal blade securely fastened to its tapered end. A sickle? What had I stumbled into? Is the sickle a metaphor for what is on the other side of the door? Who, or rather what, was knocking? Was my time due? Did the messenger bring a fresh beginning? Was there someone in here, some one alive? My tired grey matter was playing cruel tricks on me. Apprehensive, the hairs on the back of my neck were at full alert, yet, in a way, I welcomed whatever awaited me.

Grabbed the oily doorknob firmly in one hand, the lethal sickle in the other. Raised the instrument of death high above my head, ready to strike out. Turned and pulled swiftly: opening the antique door so as to surprise my guest. Dark blur swept up toward me. Wet. That’s my lost dogs name. Wet. He found me before I could find him. Here in this old sickle factory.

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  • Jasin on Jan 11, 2009

    Creepy then cute lol, nice job.

  • Darren Goad on Jan 11, 2009

    I agree with creepy. I’m a bit miffed. I get sucked in and on the edge of my seet and … What… it’s a dog. Called “Wet” no less. “Cujo” I could have handled… but “Wet”? But I suppose it’s better than my BF who has a cat named “le chat”.

  • Sotiris on Jan 11, 2009

    You write well! Why not starting a novel?

  • Clay Hurtubise on Jan 11, 2009

    lol, you guys! My cat was called ‘Lunch’ and at one point had three dogs: Way, ‘2′, & Much. Fun to be at the park and just yell Way too much! and have three dogs come running at you!
    Sotiris, I have written a book and you can read the first chapter of DRUG TRIP here on Triond. It is broken up into several sections due to length. Let me know shat you think.
    Thanks,
    Clay

  • goodselfme on Jan 12, 2009

    ONce I had 13 dogs and 15 cats so you know I love animals. This was a great story. You always bring such a movement of emotions to your writes. Well done, I enjoyed your words.

  • Louie Jerome on Jan 12, 2009

    I just happened to Stumble on this one too!

  • William L Domme on Jan 12, 2009

    I like paragraph five, \”tired gray matter playing tricks\”. I can relate to that notion. It\’ll be a while though before my tired gray matter lights on the concept of a sickle factory though.

  • James DeVere on Jan 12, 2009

    Clay this was a wonderful turn of events – the sickle ( death ) in your hands. The pills, the exotic sunglasses the disorientation and then discovering your lost pet.

    Great writing . j

  • Geri Ohara on Jan 12, 2009

    Hi Clay……..very atmospheric and then a strangely cute twist :-) Liked it

  • C Jordan on Jan 18, 2009

    A very good write Clay

  • rutherfranc on Jan 22, 2009

    a very entertaining piece..

  • nutuba on Jan 24, 2009

    This was fun! Great tension and buildup before the release. Well done.

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