A shop assistant has his mother’s illness on his mind. A sequel to a previous story about The Lolly Shop.

As much as Frank hated the three o’clock rush on weekdays, he despised weekends even more. It didn’t seem possible that the Lolly Shop could get any more people into it than it did on Friday after school but somehow it did. Saturdays were a constant after-school rush, especially on rainy days. The enticing caramel smell lured people in from the street and the warm bubble-bath feeling locked them in. Frank stood staring aimlessly at the massive boxes of Russian Fudge waiting for him to shelve them. He wondered how long it would take until the store was finally exhausted of its fudge supplies. As it turned out, it only took half an hour until the whole stock of Russian Fudge was gone.

Saturday didn’t seem to be coming any where near to an end. People flooded in by the second making the store dangerously full. Shelves began to wobble as hundreds of small children started to become desperate for some sugar. Frank marveled at his fathers never ending smile, Frank couldn’t see any reason to smile. The shop stunk of wet customers, the noise was excruciatingly loud and the little children all had too much energy to stand still. The more Frank thought about it, the more tempted he was to sprint through the little door and out of the city. The only real reason he hadn’t lost his mind yet was the thought of his afternoon visit he took to the hospital on Saturdays. He turned his attention from it and resumed the dull task of re-stocking all the empty sweet containers.

As the day rolled on, agonizingly slowly, customers finally began to thin out. Frank noticed his fathers smile becoming more and more forced as the day came to a close. He found that very odd as it was only now that Frank saw any reason to smile; within the hour he would be on his way to visit his mother. He felt in such a good mood that when one particularly boisterous twelve year old knocked a small box of Fizzing Sherbet Straws off the counter, not only did he not kick the boy out of the shop but he cleaned up the mess himself. Frank felt quite proud of his kindness. Apparently so did his father as Frank was let out of the shop fifteen minutes early.

Finally, with a new found vigor Frank strolled down the wet road on the way to the bus stop. It seemed that the day was looking up for him, perhaps he could cope with another week or two at the lolly shop after all. The bus was crammed with business people returning home forcing Frank to stand, wedged between an overly stout man who kept flicking his umbrella in a fashion that sprayed Frank’s legs with rain water and a stick-thin woman with a pointed nose who looked to Frank like someone who could do with a good slap. Eventually Frank snapped at the stout man to hold his umbrella still, the man looked terribly offended and got off the bus at the next stop, still sniffing and muttering about the rudeness of teenagers. Despite that, Frank was still in good spirits when the hospital came into view.

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  • IcyCucky on Jan 2, 2008

    Wonderful story, Lucy. I feel Frank’s thoughts and feelings.

  • louie jerome on Jan 2, 2008

    Well written and as Icy says, Frank’s feelings come through.

  • francie on Jan 2, 2008

    You have cultivated a very real and interesting story. I was caught up in it from beginning to end. This boys loyalty to his mom is inspiring. I like the Lolly shop stories!

  • shaun ashcroft on Jan 2, 2008

    You draw a picture with your words.

  • Dee Huff on Jan 2, 2008

    This is good, Lucy. I want to know what happens next.

  • Jessica Fike on Jan 2, 2008

    VERY NICE!

  • beauley,Lucien on Jan 4, 2008

    To draw from Shaun\’s comment…You truly convey a picture with your eloquently and strategically placed words. Please do not ever write gory horror stories, otherwise your suspensful audience will have to sleep with lights on and cling to a past teddy bear. You write extremely well. You have a gift. Please don\’t put your golden pen down. A treasure…Lucy.

  • Darlene McFarlane on Jan 4, 2008

    Bravo and thank you Lucy! The second part was well worth the wait. I see Frank as a different person now.

    I was so excited when I found out this was the next part of the Lolly Shop, I felt like a little kid delving in for a good read. I am asking the same question that I asked after reading the first part though…is there more to come?

  • C A Johnson on Jan 5, 2008

    I loved it Lucy! I agree with Darlene, I was looking forward to reading the next chapter in the story. I felt so bad for Frank. He really seems to care about his mother. Are you going to write another part to the story? I’m really hoping that his mother will be okay. :)

  • tutor1235 on Jan 6, 2008

    Oooh, this is cool! Now I need to go back and read the first part…

  • C A Johnson on Jan 10, 2008

    I think you will like it tutor. Lucy has done a really good job with this series.

  • KathySpring on Jan 14, 2008

    Wow is all i can think to say. Good job, thanks for posting

  • Meri Jeffrey on Jan 17, 2008

    There’s control in the suspense – very good control!

  • Alice.M on Feb 1, 2008

    Wow what an amazing writer to write such a beautiful story ;)

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