A shop assistant has his mother’s illness on his mind. A sequel to a previous story about The Lolly Shop.

It was a short walk from the bus stop to the hospital and it was just Frank’s luck that the rain began to pour again as he got off the bus. By the time he was safely inside the hospital he was saturated, he gave the hospital workers apologetic looks as he left a trail of wet shoeprints on the immaculately clean and dry hospital floors.

Although it made little difference to his unkempt appearance, Frank paused outside his mother’s door, smoothed down his hair and tucked in his shirt. As always when his hand grasped the door handle to room 233 at the hospital, his stomach gave a little jolt. The tiny room was nothing like the lolly shop. It was monotonous, dreary and had the distinct smell of disease trapped in it. Frank wished he’d had the sense to bring flowers; instead he pulled a small paper bag of mint humbugs from his pocket and placed them by the bedside table. The woman in the bed was fast asleep; her mouth was open slightly giving her an utterly helpless and innocent look. There was a photograph next to the bag of mint humbugs. It depicted a small family, a mother, father and son. The son was only two years old. The man’s smile was so broad and happy; Frank immediately knew it was his father’s face. The woman was extremely pretty, her long hair curled about her sweet face and her features were so joyful Frank wondered what could possibly make someone so happy. Now, when Frank looked at her sleeping in front of him he barely recognised her. Her red hair had thinned and become wiry, her face hollowed and her skin paled but her beauty was still apparent.

The tubes and wires attached to his mother’s arms joined up to humming machines and the machine that observed her heart beat beeped at irregular times. Frank supposed that it was the disease making his mother’s heart beat so out of time. Dilated Cardiomyopathy is what the doctors had called her sickness. They said it was her heart muscles that were failing. Frank didn’t pretend to understand how it worked but he had faith that she could get better. The only way that she could however, was if Frank kept up his job at the sweet store. Even now, when he could see his mother in front of him, he still felt the selfish urge to run away from his life stuck as a shop assistant.

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  • IcyCucky on Jan 2, 2008

    Wonderful story, Lucy. I feel Frank’s thoughts and feelings.

  • louie jerome on Jan 2, 2008

    Well written and as Icy says, Frank’s feelings come through.

  • francie on Jan 2, 2008

    You have cultivated a very real and interesting story. I was caught up in it from beginning to end. This boys loyalty to his mom is inspiring. I like the Lolly shop stories!

  • shaun ashcroft on Jan 2, 2008

    You draw a picture with your words.

  • Dee Huff on Jan 2, 2008

    This is good, Lucy. I want to know what happens next.

  • Jessica Fike on Jan 2, 2008

    VERY NICE!

  • beauley,Lucien on Jan 4, 2008

    To draw from Shaun\’s comment…You truly convey a picture with your eloquently and strategically placed words. Please do not ever write gory horror stories, otherwise your suspensful audience will have to sleep with lights on and cling to a past teddy bear. You write extremely well. You have a gift. Please don\’t put your golden pen down. A treasure…Lucy.

  • Darlene McFarlane on Jan 4, 2008

    Bravo and thank you Lucy! The second part was well worth the wait. I see Frank as a different person now.

    I was so excited when I found out this was the next part of the Lolly Shop, I felt like a little kid delving in for a good read. I am asking the same question that I asked after reading the first part though…is there more to come?

  • C A Johnson on Jan 5, 2008

    I loved it Lucy! I agree with Darlene, I was looking forward to reading the next chapter in the story. I felt so bad for Frank. He really seems to care about his mother. Are you going to write another part to the story? I’m really hoping that his mother will be okay. :)

  • tutor1235 on Jan 6, 2008

    Oooh, this is cool! Now I need to go back and read the first part…

  • C A Johnson on Jan 10, 2008

    I think you will like it tutor. Lucy has done a really good job with this series.

  • KathySpring on Jan 14, 2008

    Wow is all i can think to say. Good job, thanks for posting

  • Meri Jeffrey on Jan 17, 2008

    There’s control in the suspense – very good control!

  • Alice.M on Feb 1, 2008

    Wow what an amazing writer to write such a beautiful story ;)

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