Comments on: The Meaning of Life is a Lie http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/ Sat, 02 Jun 2012 17:20:42 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: Brian Daniel Stankich http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/comment-page-1/#comment-887549 Brian Daniel Stankich Thu, 20 Aug 2009 16:55:57 +0000 http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/#comment-887549 I like the idea of your story, but found your run-on sentences to be discouraging in my sense of what is proper when I read a story because when you use run-on sentences the reader doesn't know when to take a breath while the action keeps going on and on and on and I also found that your overuse of the word 'and' was way overboard and unnecessary and distracting and it gave me a sense of the story never ending and like the end was never going to come and, well, I think you understand what I'm saying. Brian I like the idea of your story, but found your run-on sentences to be discouraging in my sense of what is proper when I read a story because when you use run-on sentences the reader doesn’t know when to take a breath while the action keeps going on and on and on and I also found that your overuse of the word ‘and’ was way overboard and unnecessary and distracting and it gave me a sense of the story never ending and like the end was never going to come and, well, I think you understand what I’m saying.

Brian

]]> By: CutestPrincess http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/comment-page-1/#comment-843895 CutestPrincess Thu, 23 Jul 2009 19:35:13 +0000 http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/#comment-843895 such a beautiful story... such a beautiful story…

]]> By: Judith Dupree http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/comment-page-1/#comment-843893 Judith Dupree Fri, 03 Jul 2009 17:04:52 +0000 http://authspot.com/short-stories/the-meaning-of-life-is-a-lie/#comment-843893 Magical I loved it Magical I loved it

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