The Village series continues. When a vampire feeds upon the innocence of youth, vengeance and retribution are swift.

                                       The Village-Part 4- The Orphan

 

                                                            By David Crerand

 

 

            I was made in anger. I was not expected to survive the fire that would come with the first dawn after my creation. I was sent to kill, and death was delivered. I killed my intended target, and later that night, my maker, and since that night thousands more. I was eleven years old that night, I am now over six hundred years old. I still appear the child, however, I am vengeance, I am the double-edged sword, I am “Thresher”.

 

            I was scooped up from a dank, cobblestone alley off of a dead end street in the most dangerous section of Amsterdam. I’d been beaten, raped and left for dead. I was the perfect instrument of death, ready to be wielded by another’s hand. I had already been a member of one of Amsterdam’s notorious gangs of street boys. My parents, long dead and forgotten, I was surviving by thieving, begging, and whoring. I was just another of the countless rats existing in deWallen, the quays, the oldest, most despicable section of the ancient Port City of Amsterdam. Twice during the early sixteen hundreds the city had been ravaged by the Black Death of plague. The pallor and stench of death hung over the city like a shroud that could not be shed.

            It was just after the last days of the reign of Pope Paul III. Dead now but five years, his last, most terrible legacy, ‘The Supreme Sacred Congregation of the Universal Inquisition’, was just building its base of strength and power through the regions of central Europe. It was the belief of the inquisitors that punishment did not take place for the correction and the good of the punished, but rather for the public good, that those witnessing the punishments might be terrified of the consequences and therefore weaned away from any evils that they themselves might commit. It was for this reason, and this reason alone, that punishments were designed to be such brutal, grotesque and bloody public demonstrations.

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  • Mr Ghaz on Sep 6, 2009

    Great post!..a very interesting story..very well written piece and wonderful presented..well done!! I LIKED IT! thanks for sharing this magnificent stuff.

  • Momof4 on Sep 6, 2009

    Well done, wonderfully written. I really liked it!

  • Faith Hodge on Sep 7, 2009

    Interesting with clear detail. Well written.

  • clafleur on Sep 7, 2009

    thumbs up

  • Anne Lyken Garner on Sep 7, 2009

    Well written. You have a terrific imagination!

    Maybe there could’ve been a bit more active scenes. For example, ‘the power coursing through me was intoxicating’ (though a good expression) could’ve been written in a discriptive way to *show* that it was rather than telling your reader that it was. It could’ve lit a fire under your (his) skin, exploded in the veins like… etc. This would make it less cliched. This is just my opinion and may be totally incorrect, so don’t mind me at all.

    Sometimes telling your reader what to think can leave the particular piece of writing a bit flat.

    Have you ever thought of putting all this on a serialized blog?

  • XXElleXX on Sep 7, 2009

    A comment from Elle:

    You consistently deliver quality and the series for me is becoming more intriguing. Although I have to admit that at the beginning, I thought ‘Oh dear David, I’ve read something similar before’ and it was a bit dull here and there.. but I was nicely surprised as I continued reading the rest of it. The historical setting held my interest as did the the orphan’s first-person account of how he became one of the undead.
    We have learned that power is a positive force if it is used for positive purposes.

  • RS Wing on Oct 1, 2009

    I really love your violent horror serials. Makes me want to go snap a few necks and rib cages…..blood , well I’m not to fond of drinking from that challese but I really dig your horror imagery. It’s inspiring in some sick way, I have to admit. From Amsterdam to L.A.. California better watch out….there’s a Vamp on the loose. Great story to your series David

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