Zaphyre meets another Tier’Dal in the Moonlighters Guild. Is he an ally or a foe? After a brief encounter at Thundering Steppes, she finds she can’t stop thinking about him. He has crept into her life, her thoughts, and perhaps even her heart.

Time passed, weeks became months as Zaphyre did what was expected of her as a member of the Moonlighters. She traveled the lands and continued with her training, perfecting her skills with the staff and sword. She even hunted with some of the members regardless of their race or alliance. She learned what she could about the guild and delivered the information to the queen. She met with the other Tier’dals and worked with them on their common cause. Evil plans were created and the approppriate moves were made to undermind the guild from within. Discord grew within the ranks so slowly it was barely noticeable. In the meantime, the fury priestess continued unnoticed as she traveled from Qeynos to Neriak almost on daily basis, completing her mission.

One late evening, Zaphyre returned home from her journey to Thundering Steppes and the Enchanted Lands. The rocky cavernous city of Neriak was such a welcoming sight. As her tired mare slowly made her way towards the main entrance, the young fury lifted up her eyes to admire the beautifully sculpted Tier’Dals on each side of the gateway. Zaphyre studied their faces that reeked of defiance and hate to everyone who entered. The guards below stood at attention as they watched her slowly pass between them.

Every time she returned to Neriak, her heart would fill with such pride at the magnificence of it all. It was the city of her parents as well as ancestors. The blue flames blazed with the glory that represent those who built the massive walls and towers all around her as she continued to ride through the dark streets leading to the new Foreign Quarter.

This was indeed her city, her home. As soon as she thought that, her smile slowly disappeared for she remembered Neriak wasn’t “his” home. Her dark eyes lowered to gaze on the beautiful mane of Amie. She was thinking of him again. She has been thinking of him from the moment she woke up, distracted only by potential danger and the need for sleep. The clip clopping of the horse’s hooves on the cobblestone section of the street kept her awake as Amie headed instinctually for the stables.

Zaphyre carefully removed the saddlebags and slowly carried everything to the local inn not too far away. The local courtesans were out and about doing what they do best. Zaphyre smiled warmly at them as she headed for inn’s front door. She almost became one of them when she first returned to Neriak. Should she ever tell “him” about that part of her life? She shuddered and shook her head. Some things are best left unsaid.

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  • Mystical Whitewolf on Jun 10, 2009

    wonderful story, I love reading your work my friend. Well done.

  • James DeVere on Jun 11, 2009

    Fantastic. Shorter,pithier expression, rivetting dialouge and awesome pictures. A clearer expression of your fantastic idea. Very well done!

    Thank-you . j

  • Leafygreens on Jun 11, 2009

    Thank you both for stopping by with your encouraging words. Keep reading and writing!

  • Gabby on Jun 12, 2009

    Your writing is always entertaining and mysterious. The only things that I might change are: 1. You change tenses in the last paragraph; 2. Some of the language seems a bit anachronistic (gosh) and out of character for Zaphyre (she sometimes sounds like a schoolgirl in her dialogue). She may feel like a schoolgirl, but I don’t think she would let it show. In all, I found it interesting and well written.

  • Leafygreens on Jun 12, 2009

    Thank you, Gabby! Yes, she was still kind of innocent in her hatred. She has a lot to learn when it comes to males and love. I will keep trying to watch those words and tenses.

  • Johanan Rakkav on Jun 12, 2009

    Hi Leafygreens!

    Yes, I put in my vote for this too. This is beautifully written overall. You said that your recent collaberation with me has helped you as a writer. Whether or not I’m truly the cause, it shows. I found this most enjoyable.

    If these are fellow Tier’dal, though, then shouldn’t they use the same archaic dialect consistently? “Thee, thou, thy, etc.” when speaking in the first person singular, “you, you, your, etc.” when in the second person singular? And Gabby’s right about anachronistic exclamations. You may notice that when I have my characters dialoging with yours (and with each other), I take the best care I know how to make sure they express themselves consistently. Chris Alan Starbright only calls Zaphyre V’nae “thou” when speaking Thexian or when imitating its idiom in Common (Albionic). Otherwise he says “your” to Z. and to Z. and Kharm together alike.

    And just who is this mysterious lover? If you don’t want to give it away, please tell me privately.

  • Leafygreens on Jun 13, 2009

    Thanks for the tips. The dialogue was actually roleplayed and not all players, in fact very few in Everquest2 ever speak with Old English team. For the sake of my story, I should fix those two problems and will. Thanks again for your helpful comments!

  • Makker on Jun 16, 2009

    Hey KloeyZ! I liked the story but does that mean poor ole Zharm bit the dust?

  • Leafygreens08 on Jun 16, 2009

    Nooo.. Kharm is fine! :) This was before they met.

  • Tom on Jun 17, 2009

    Great story! Alway’s interesting . Keep up the good work :)

  • HeyZel on Jun 23, 2009

    Ver nice and interesting story.

  • Dee Gold on Jun 28, 2009

    Keep this story going….

  • diamondpoet on Apr 30, 2010

    You talents are definitely wasted on this site, not say that the work shouldn’t be posted for all to see and enjoy, but you should write somewhere you will be paid according to your talents.

  • Leafygreens on May 1, 2010

    Thank you so much for your comment, Diamond! I have started a new storyline and will be posting here on Triond and on Bukisa to see if I can’t increase my revenue. Thanks so much for visiting!

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