A 1073 word piece of short fiction.

The atmosphere was intense, the noise a shimmering crescendo.

Dylan McCabe blinked as blood again began to trickle from the cut above his eye. His trainer smoothed it gently with a towel, before running his finger along its  furrow. “You’ve gotta keep your guard up, Dylan,” he said, motioning with his fists. “If he attacks that cut once more, this fights gonna be over.”

Yet Dylan wasn’t listening. The words simply slipped away and beyond him, becoming distant echo’s in the strained night air. His eyes were fixed upon his opponent, his stare cold and dispassionate. For nine rounds they had plundered each other with all that they had, an endless barrage of bare fists and thrashing limbs. The had each felled and each been felled, tumbled like sunshine at the break of dusk, but both had risen time and time again. And yet, even now, Callum wouldn’t meet his stare. Instead, he simply dropped his gaze towards his feet, down to where the world once lay.

Then came the bell.

Dylan stirred from his daydream, leaping outwards from his lethargy. His feet danced lightly against the canvas, his hands into fists jumping with life. Callum seemed cautious and slow, his feet shuffling back towards his corner, towards safety. His movements were heavy and ponderous, as he circled restlessly in the ring centre, when a sudden burst of forward momentum took Dylan to within an inch of his opponent. A short, sharp jab with the right connected to the side of Callum’s head, snapping his face sideways and his gaze away to the right. With his guard temporarily down, the crowd noise lifted as they longed for the kill. Dylan sensed it himself, the mist before his eyes becoming darker and more ferocious, tainting his target in red. Another right scythed towards Callum, cutting and bruising as it landed against his chin, and then another. Callum, shaken from his balance, scrambled for the safety of the ropes, trying desperately to remain on his feet.

Dylan simply pursued him, his will hungry and his desire strong. A swinging left hook fell from the sky and caught Callum on the cheek, followed quickly by a fierce right that crashed into his unguarded mid drift. Another left, another right, both body shots of such power that the noise of the crowd seemed to pale against the cracking of knuckles against bone.

‘Please stop the fight,’ thought Dylan, the words rolling from the tip if his tongue and falling back into consciousness. ‘Please stop it now.’ 

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  • Raj the Tora on Oct 2, 2010

    Very nice short fiction Lew. You have captured nice twists throughout. Keep it up

  • drelayaraja on Oct 2, 2010

    Very good write….

  • addjust on Oct 2, 2010

    great post

  • Minister Marlene on Oct 3, 2010

    Oh I do hate an unhappy ending. It was his brother he was boxing, how sad. I just don’t like boxing as a sport. Boxing and other sports shorten the life span. It’s a well written story. I felt as if I were in the stands.

  • Minister Marlene on Oct 3, 2010

    Oh I do hate an unhappy ending. It was his brother he was boxing, how sad. I just don\’t like boxing as a sport. Boxing and other sports shorten the life span. It is a well crafted story. I felt as if I were in the stands.

  • shivedi on Oct 3, 2010

    I Like It Nice Post :)

  • Aiyanna on Oct 3, 2010

    Good write

  • LewSethics on Oct 3, 2010

    Good writing Lewis, but I must confess, I’m not a big fan of unhappy endings either.

  • dak on Oct 4, 2010

    As usual you have written an awesome piece

  • L R Humphries on Oct 4, 2010

    Thanks guys, for writing and commenting.

    I know the unhappy ending is a bit hit and miss with people – I like to write the odd sad end though, it just feels a little more real at times.

    Take care

    Lew

  • Brewed Coffee on Oct 4, 2010

    That is a sad ending. I could feel Dylan’s anguish. I just wonder why they are in that situation that they have to fight each other.

    A very well written story.

  • L R Humphries on Oct 4, 2010

    Cheers for your comments.

    Take care

    Lew

  • Freedom Rising on Oct 5, 2010

    Good read. I wasn’t expecting that at the end.

  • L R Humphries on Oct 7, 2010

    Thanks Freedom.

    Take care

    Lew

  • observer1 on Oct 16, 2010

    Good writing and I don’t mind an unhappy ending. That’s often the way it is in boxing. Ricky Hatton, Frank Bruno, the great Ali, mentally and physically boxing is brutal. But it can be uplifting too.
    Regards

  • DR.VNS on Nov 4, 2010

    Very good writing

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