http://authspot.com/short-stories/under-the-clouds/ Fri, 17 Feb 2012 09:50:25 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 http://authspot.com/short-stories/under-the-clouds/comment-page-1/#comment-440459 cocokitten Sat, 29 Mar 2008 21:28:15 +0000 http://authspot.com/short-stories/under-the-clouds/#comment-440459 I enjoyed your piece and thanks for the comments explaining your motivation. One way to strengthen the differences between the male/female characters is to write a draft version where they are extreme versions of themselves and work back from there. Also, if you change the tone of the narrator it will help the reader notice the difference between the two. Hope that helps if you want to use that technique again. Murakami is a great influence on me as is Kafka, if you enjoy his style, try Calvino. I enjoyed your piece and thanks for the comments explaining your motivation. One way to strengthen the differences between the male/female characters is to write a draft version where they are extreme versions of themselves and work back from there. Also, if you change the tone of the narrator it will help the reader notice the difference between the two. Hope that helps if you want to use that technique again. Murakami is a great influence on me as is Kafka, if you enjoy his style, try Calvino.

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