My Love Doctor challenge using the words, hypocrite, cookie jar, telephone and city.

Dag nam it, somebody done stole my cookie jar.  I don’t have time to look now, I need to go down the road a piece to put this letter in the mail box, I’m mailing it off to the big city, that’s where my younger brother lives you know, he’s one of them high rolling people, thinks he knows everything, too bad he doesn’t know his girlfriend is such a hypocrite, running around all over town with every Tom, Dick and Harry.

Oh Lord, is that the telephone I hear ringing, I done set here all morning and as soon as I get ready to walk out the door, somebody wants to talk to me, I hope that’s not the Internal Revenue Service calling, asking about my older brother again, Lord a mercy, never a moments peace.  Well, just as I thought, that was the Internal Revenue Service, brother Willie done loss his house for tax evasion.  Willie was proud of that house too, always talking about his friends not having a pot to piss in and if they had a pot, they wouldn’t have a window to throw it out of.  One thing is for sure, brother Willie can now talk about his own pot and window.

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  • Margaret Boseroy on Oct 19, 2011

    Nicely done, Shirley! Love the style of writing in this piece.

  • erwinkennythomas on Oct 19, 2011

    lovely!

  • Val Mills on Oct 19, 2011

    Wow, loved this! Have I been missing something with Love Doctor’s challenge? Love your writing, this piece is complete in itself.

  • Ruby Hawk on Oct 19, 2011

    Shirley, I like it. it gave me my giggle for the day. You did well with the challenge.

  • Tulan on Oct 19, 2011

    Shirley, you did yourself proud. That’s a dad gummed good story.

  • Profit Buzz on Oct 19, 2011

    Did not quite understand it but the five ahead of seem to think it is good then I guess it must. I am not so smart you see.

  • Lady Sunshine on Oct 20, 2011

    LOL. I think big brother Willie took your cookie jar (only cause he lost his house). You have risen to the challenge well, Shirley. Thanks for the laugh.

  • FX777222999 on Oct 20, 2011

    My brother ate my cookie and my sister broke my cookie jar. How come? Mother scolded me for my broken cookie jar. Trash bin is the right answer.

  • tonywriter on Oct 21, 2011

    very good and interesting

  • prakash vaghela on Oct 22, 2011

    nice articles

  • mdrkarim7 on Oct 27, 2011

    What a writing!

  • Melody SJAL on Nov 1, 2011

    Very good writing.

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