By Cody Oglesbee (cody.oglesbee@gmail.com)

At great distances I have gone, to find truth in a world that conveys none. With pitiful remorse, I am humbled. The overpowering truth created in my mind, brings doubtful hope and the anguish of pain.  I walk on fire with an open mind with a divine passion to find a great reality in the midst of my fellow blind. We struggle on in blind ambition with hopeful eyes gazed upon a light that does not shine. At the crescent of my journey in youth, hope strikes my heart. A true hope for my ever receding world to which I owe my life, a dim light to which I will now devote my personal study. It is out of selfish anguish that I do daringly release my mind into such a study of conspiracy. It is also love and my ever so slight hanging grasp on the belief of a prophecy that I find myself walking into the shadows of our governments government. In a world consumed in pain, I hope to the pit of my heart that my findings are found to be non-fictional. For this pursuit of happiness is endless in reality. And I will never find it, but in my dreams to unlock ultimate reality, I will not be stopped. 

Veda | Vida – Ludum

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  • Stickinthemud on Oct 30, 2011

    As far as making a declaration of studious hope goes, yours lacks in clarity. You make no references to the “truths” you seek, the thing that humbles you, the conspiracies you wish to uncover. Are we to read through this onto ourselves? That would be a tricky thing to do since your suggestive nouns are unclear.

    Mistake not my intent; I am just as curious as any other philosophe. I just wonder why your voice here is so uncertain.

    You make a good attempt at sounding meaningful. But, I think the biggest problem with your prose here is the fact that you avoid direct verbs, and let’s not forget that verbs are the most important words for conveying purpose and intent. Sharpen your verbs! Clarify your nouns. Do away with as many adjectives as possible. That is one mistake that many beginning writers make: believing that adjectives carry more power than the nouns they modify. Been there done that. lol

    Best of luck,
    Stick.

  • unknowngal on Nov 2, 2011

    u r such an amazing writer..keep going!

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