Some thoughts on New Orleans and Hurricane Katrina.

Once upon a time in a faraway land, in a different time and place in our history, there was this planet called earth.  Earth was filled with many magical places and sites. Mountain ranges that all you could see was snow and peaks for miles and miles.  Oceans so deep that after years of exploration the humans who inhabited earth still knew nothing about the bottom. Forests so thick and hidden they only saw sunlight for a few months each year.

On this planet earth there was a magical city called New Orleans.  It is said that while you were in New Orleans you could walk down any umber of streets and hear constant music.  In New Orleans humans would dress up as other people and live their double life for the night. They would sing and dance and laugh and carry on like there was no tomorrow.

And once a year there was a big celebration called Mardi Gras.  People from all over the land came to join in on these festivities.  There was glutony to be found in all the resteraunts, people eating fried donuts coverd in powdered sugar, donuts that melted in ones mouth.  There were sandwhiches thrown together between some baguette bread with some mayo and lettuce that were wildly popular and cheap.  There was alcohol everywhere one looked, free drinks, expensive drinks, the liquid devil as far as the eye could see. Partys and fun all around. Unfortunately all of the magic of this beautiful town was set to a background of drugs, violence, even murder.

The story goes something like this, at the beginning of the fall of the human being there was this guy named god who apparently decided that all the bad things that occur there deserved to be punished so he raised the seas with a hurricane in attempt to punish them.  But he must have made a mistake, because he nearly wiped off most gulf coast communities around New Orleans, and the part of New Orleans where most of the sin happened remained in much better shape than the small honest god fearing communities around it. And maybe what he didn’t realize was that this little Hurricane of his would actually cause more murder, more sin, and more unnecessary pain.  But some humans still thought it was an act of god, so if it was an act of god, it made one wonder; So, if it was an act of god, even god must make mistakes, right?

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  • MrZebra84 on Mar 25, 2009

    Very interesting dear.

  • Lady Madonna on Mar 26, 2009

    Okay okay okay, so I’m sorry to do this, but it was really distracting. There’s a ton of misspellings and typos in here:
    umber (p2)- needs to have an ‘n’ to make it number, glutony (p3)- needs another ‘t’ to be gluttony, resteraunts (p3)- needs to be restaurants,’ones mouth’ (p3)- needs an apostrophe to be ‘one’s mouth’, sandwhiches (p3)- needs to be ’sandwiches’, partys (p3)- needs to be ‘parties’, and in p4 if you’re going to use ’some guy named god then that name should start with a big G whenever mentioned. Okay, I’m sorry, I just couldn’t get past it when I was reading it all. It’s very habitual to me.

    Beyond technical things, I really like where you’re going with this. However, I find myself kind of thinking that there’s a really awesome buildup and then I get to paragraph 4 and I find myself thinking ‘that’s it?’. It just seems that there’s such rich description with the first part and then just a quick cap up to put your idea across. I think it would do well with maybe a bit more expansion on the description of the hurricane or maybe going a little more into depth on the huge mistake that ‘God’ made. Overall, though, I love the concept that you have going here.

  • Jeffrey B. Merrow on Mar 26, 2009

    it s good and its full of emotion dont correct the typos and always leave things a little un done what i have found is that in this group of people thereare those who thrive on contraversy and being a critique its hillarious to watch them pic spelling mistakes and punctiation mistake out of your works it also gives you tons of more hits it is a tool that generates a feeding frenzy with these people take a look at my article IS IT OK TO BE GAY IN GODS EYES they have gone crazy on it comment wise yours is a good write cause contraversy and you have a winning formula

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