Life is so important, why spend it walking around in a daze?

I wrote this poem, because I think this is exactly what a liquor would says.

Oh sure, take a sip of me, why don’t you.

While I erode your insides,

you remain without a clue.

You use me to drown away your sorrows.

I’ll wash away the pain right now,

but have you considered,

 how you’ll feel tomorrow?

I”ll  make you feel happy-go-lucky,

but just for one day.

Help you wake-up feeling

weired and disoriented,

Yeah! you’ll fix some weird concoction

and hope the pain will go away.

Reach inside yourself and find a happy place.

For I am just a temporary fix.

I can’t really make your pain go away.

With your life, your taking a big risk.

Sure there isn’t anything wrong with

drinking in moderation,

but drinking too much of me,

will make you experience,

an ugly and weird sensation.

I am capable of making,

 your life get out of control.

I am the creator of death,

and  I have been succesfully

in possessing many lost souls.

When you pick-up that glass.

I need you to stop and ask.

Will this be to me an addition?

Can I control this,

with the utmost restrictions?

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  • lillyrose on Nov 29, 2009

    A very Frank article and poem about the danger of ‘DRINK’ its such an easy path for us to float down. My Father is a recovering alcoholic, he can’t drink any more or he will die and he hasn’t. His feelings of guilt for his past life are just starting to go, 3 years after he was rushed into hospital with a failed liver. I know all this but still find myself drinking far to much.

  • AlmaG on Nov 29, 2009

    Wonderful article! This is a great eye opener for the dangers of drinking and how it can ruin one’s life. Great share thanks! :)

  • aunslaught on Nov 29, 2009

    crap.. this made me feel all.. depressed..
    You worked hard for this btw. I’m glad to say that i have never ever drunk in my entire life, and i will pray for you and all the people who have to find the self-restraint they require.. Love the article!

  • Petalm on Nov 29, 2009

    Very honest piece, I’ve also encounted people I love in this position.

  • Prometheus Ridley Scott on Nov 29, 2009

    Article is great. As a person who as lived with someone with a drink problem it can be very difficult and is an illness.

  • TroostAvenue on Nov 29, 2009

    Thank you.

  • chantell on Nov 29, 2009

    Great work. Thanks for sharing

  • Themax on Nov 29, 2009

    really beautiful poem and meaningful thoughts!! Very good friend,stop Alcohol!

  • Videomark on Nov 29, 2009

    More good reasons not to drink

  • chitragopi on Nov 29, 2009

    Emotional piece. Wish your son gets out of it.

  • Sourav on Nov 29, 2009

    Very very interesting article.

  • Leonardo da Vinci E. on Nov 29, 2009

    I do not allow myself to use any alcohol, and if you catch me in a bar with a glass and red liquid, its cranberry juice; But no one else has to know (wink)!

  • cutedrishti8 on Nov 29, 2009

    Thanks to god I am too far from this bad habit..

  • abhishek40914 on Nov 29, 2009

    nice one

  • ladyhappy on Nov 29, 2009

    very nice!! this should make anybody think twice.

  • diamondpoet on Nov 29, 2009

    This is for leonardo only. Unfortunately I am not embarrassed to share my past life and that is exactly what it is, maybe this will help someone else, no one is perfect, but they can always turn around their lives. I am sorry you don’t approve. Maybe there is some skeletons in your closet.

  • Frances Lawrence on Nov 29, 2009

    You are very brave to be so open about your experiences, thank you, it may help others to avoid the same mistakes. I liked your poem. I hope very much that your son accepts help before it is too late.

  • V rank on Nov 29, 2009

    hahaha… amazing… I am guilty with this… great share…!

  • Eunice Tan on Nov 30, 2009

    Late (regret) is better than never. Will pray for both of you.

  • Christine Ramsay on Nov 30, 2009

    This piece will be a real wakeup call to many people. It is so easy to overdo the drink but much harder to stop. An excellent post and poem.

    Christine

  • Patrick Regoniel on Nov 30, 2009

    Something serious that needs enlightenment. Better do something before it gets worse. I’ll pray you’ll find your way…

  • TroostAvenue on Nov 30, 2009

    DP has misinterpreted my brief Thank You from 11/29. Its brevity was not intended to be trivial or dismissive or disapproving. Quite the contrary. It took a great amount of strength for her to reveal personal secrets in an attempt to help others. It is in that context that I again say Thank You.

  • diamondpoet on Nov 30, 2009

    Hello, Hello Patrick, if you would have read the entire article you wouldn’t have left the comment you left. I HAVE ALREADY FOUND MY WAY PATRICK, PLEASE READ BEFORE COMMENTING. I WASN’T ASKING FOR A PITY PARTY, I WAS TELLING THE STORY OF A PERSON WHO HAS FULLY RECOVERED AND MOVED ON WITH THEIR LIFE. OKAY PATRICK.

  • Valerie Curtiss on Nov 30, 2009

    A great write…shared from the heart of a sparkling jewel. It doesn’t mean the jewel is flawed, don’t let any negativity into your life, let the ones who spout it keep it! We know what it took for you to share you story, and bravo for it!!

  • mo hoyal on Nov 30, 2009

    Maybe you took Leonardo in the wrong way, I really don’t think he was trying to be condescending but I thank you for opening up to us. It takes a very brave soul to do this and I can well understand your wanting this to serve as a message for those who do drink too much and won’t stop. I live with an alcoholic who will not stop drinking and is still in denial he has a problem, it’s been a very hard 22 years. But, good for you. Don’t let anyone get to you!

  • PhoenixRox on Dec 2, 2009

    I think it is very courageous of you to share your story with us. I applaud you for having the courage diamond. I do hope things are never this bad. I was in a very dark place in my life too. Suicidal and depressed, never want to revisit it. God bless you.
    Love and regards,
    Rox.

  • xtine on Dec 2, 2009

    Me and my friends always share this joke: LIfe is never wasted, when you\’re wasted all the time. Btw, thank you for sharing your story here. I feel what you\’ve written because what\’s in my mind right now and as well as the peers i\’m with is all about partying. Just last weekend, we went to a club to party and they are planning to do it again this upcoming weekend. With this article, it made me realize something. Thank you for posting this.

  • deklin42 on Dec 2, 2009

    That’s deeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep.

  • Dame Barbara on Dec 2, 2009

    I am proud of you, as I know the Lord is too! Keep up the good work!

  • diamondpoet on Dec 11, 2009

    This was a powerful write, I notice that I created a forum for other to open up and speak about thing in their lives. People are afraid to say certain thing because they don’t know how they will be preceived, don’t be closed minded, listen and don’t judge, this makes the start of a very good friendship.

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